Idioglossia Between Strangers - Comments

That was such a long chapter compared to the drabbles of yours I'm used to reading. You two did a great job.
If you hadn't mentioned it, I probably wouldn't have caught on. It's there, the differences, but perfectly so.
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Your work comes from such a clear place. Everything you write has the realistic sense of urgency to it, and your characters (real, imagined, original, no matter) are always so percievable. (Not a word, but you know,)

I have a love for you as an author. Reading you when I have writers block always puts me in that mood where I have all these ideas wanting to streamline out. This was just what I decided to comment on, but I've read so much. In love with it all.

Is there going to be more chapters?

Beautiful. Very.

I'm terrible at giving comments but I loved it. (I always love it). You are both such good writers and everything flowed perfectly. At first it was a bit strange the way the paragraphs were going back and forth between Gabe and Ryan, almost like a roleplay, but then I got used to it. It was so...I can't even find the right words to describe it which is terrible considering I'm a writer. It left me speechless which is a very good thing. It's one of my favorites so far. I love Gabe's character and how he speaks and carries himself and how he interracts with Ryan. I love Ryan's character too and how Gabe sees parts of him that he wants to deny. The whole thing was amazing <3

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This is a co-write not by chapters. To give credit where credit is due, here is the breakdown.
Gabriel is a character entirely of Isa's invention, an angel.
Ryan is my character, though obviously not an original one.
All the parts were written in a roleplay. Everytime Gabriel says or does something, pretty much, it's Isa. And everytime Ryan says or does something, it's me. It's almost entirely broken down by paragraphs.
The once exception is the blowjob scene. I wrote the middle of it, though not the ending or the beginning. If you have a question, feel free to ask, but this should help you understand.
We appreciate all your comments because they'll help us understand where to improve and what is working in this experiment for us.

Also, this is the first in a series.

xoxox
-dru & isa