I really really like this. While it's kind of long for a drabble, the sentences are short and the paragraphs are set out amazingly. The breaks in between the paragraphs make it seem like someone's thoughts, rather than a story.
The idea was absolutely beautiful. I keep wondering whether the main character is crazy or if they're really an angel - personally, I like to think they turn out to be an angel and show all those doctors. Even if the x-ray didn't show any wings...
One thing: Maybe when they see it, they'd let me fly away. I think that would be better as Maybe when they see it, they'll let me fly away, because it kind of sounds like the different tenses don't fit together.
I love this paragraph; I had the x-ray in my hands. Just my shoulderblades, like a door frame. My spine, like door knobs. Maybe my ribs were trapping my wings, but they stopped listening. This is why I don't trust doctors. They lie and fake cures for money. They locked my heart away. The way you described everything in it was beautiful.
This really is close to perfect! I loved every line.
I really really like this. While it's kind of long for a drabble, the sentences are short and the paragraphs are set out amazingly. The breaks in between the paragraphs make it seem like someone's thoughts, rather than a story.
The idea was absolutely beautiful. I keep wondering whether the main character is crazy or if they're really an angel - personally, I like to think they turn out to be an angel and show all those doctors. Even if the x-ray didn't show any wings...
One thing: Maybe when they see it, they'd let me fly away. I think that would be better as Maybe when they see it, they'll let me fly away, because it kind of sounds like the different tenses don't fit together.
I love this paragraph;
I had the x-ray in my hands.
Just my shoulderblades, like a door frame.
My spine, like door knobs.
Maybe my ribs were trapping my wings, but they stopped listening.
This is why I don't trust doctors.
They lie and fake cures for money.
They locked my heart away.
The way you described everything in it was beautiful.
This really is close to perfect! I loved every line.