April 18th, 2011 at 09:11pm
This is a really interesting piece!
I'm interested in the background of the piece, and I thought your description was brilliant. You didn't go over the top when describing the ropes holding her to the bed, like when you said she felt her wrists breaking.
I thought the dialogue was really natural.
Great job, well done!
Anyways, I just love how you write Madara's character. He's so cold from the outside, but he struggles too hard to keep that cover and maintain that human side of him hidden. It's just exactly how I picture him to be.