Stained - Comments

I just knew this one would be another one to make me cry. I was so right. xD When I saw in the summary that it was a rape, I just knew it was going to be heart wrenching. It waaaaaaaas. I was crying throughout the entire thing, because it was so close to home and so perfectly on with emotions and details and just…*sigh* I need tissues now. xD I have to say the ending was indeed a little weaker than most of everything else I’ve read of yours. I felt like Brendon was…not healing, but getting over it much more quickly then he should have. That sounds odd, because he wasn’t exactly getting over it…I can’t explain it. It just felt a bit weak is all. It was still really good, and you made me cry once more. xD

<3 Haven

I agree with Daimon; the ending was amazing. It fit perfectly.
But anyways, I'm sorry it's taking me so long to get these comments out and whatnot, but the results to the contest should be up soon.
Um, well to start out, I really did like this. It was different, but that's good in a story.
I can't say that the fact that this is fanfiction is a bad thing, but it's definitely not something I've really seen before.
I love that this wasn't a love story, because it wouldn't have really fit.
This was long, but the length fits it really well.
Because of the length, I feel like I should be able to give this a lengthy and good quality comment, but I know it's not going to happen, which I don't like.
So basically, I did really like this and it was really creative; I don't think I've read anything like it before.

I loved the quote from the bathroom stall (/the title). Is it an actual quotation, or something you came up with yourself?

Also, I disagree about the ending. I liked it very much. I think it was a very good, subtle way of finishing. In my eyes, it works.

This was extremely well-written. I do sort of agree with you that the ending was a little weak, but it made sense to end there, and the rest of it was strong enough to pull it up anyway. If I pointed out every little detail I loved I'd have to quote and italicize like, more than half of the story. Your pacing was fantastic, and the strewn out ideas you put - the writing in the bathroom stall, especially, made it stand out from other stories that tackle the same subject. Call me sick but it's nothing but pure awe when I say the first part, the non-con part, was the best bit. I can tell you worked hard on it, and it showed, but at the same time it felt effortless. There was a lot of imagery there that reminds us of nicer, happier things - like the fireflies - but nothing feels out of place. The narration was just fab, and this is a great example of great storytelling - even if the story itself it is depressing as fuck.

This is really good! Is there going to be more chapters???