April Fools, Asshole - Comments

I forgot to say one thing, luv. And lucky for you, that means you get two comments. I also like to find at least one thing to constructively criticize in order to help contestants improve their writing. This entry was great, but try to add a little more descriptive detail. Not too much, but just enough that the reader gets a better since of where things are taking place and the personality of the characters. Trust me. I have trouble with this too. But for me it is just the opposite. I like to overload on detail. And NO ONE likes to read three, ten-sentenced paragraphs of nothing but description. Hehe. I hope I could be of some help to you. :)

Hahaha. This had me laughing all the way through. I like how after I read The things his fans had come with made him feel like a feeble child! Especially with some of the stories he’d read…mostly about him and his brother. And that, is where he got his idea. I instantly knew he was going to pull something on the lines of the prank he did pull. So the knowing, "edge of your seat" suspense building up to the actual prank was great. I also like how you organized it into each day of prank week. The background was simple, but I love it. Good job and good luck.