Hello! I'm here from the comment swap, and I don't know anything about Nitro lol. But, overall, I found your story to be enjoyable! I will say that there are a lot of spelling and grammar errors, but nothing that couldn't be fixed by running your chapters through spell check. I also noticed that you change tenses a lot, and where the tense changes are doesn't make much sense usually. I also think your layout could use some work, the colors are very bright, and it makes it hard to read without getting a headache. I think this story has a lot of potential!
June 14th, 2017 at 08:27am