Gone Nitro Crazy - Comments

Hello! I'm here from the comment swap, and I don't know anything about Nitro lol. But, overall, I found your story to be enjoyable! I will say that there are a lot of spelling and grammar errors, but nothing that couldn't be fixed by running your chapters through spell check. I also noticed that you change tenses a lot, and where the tense changes are doesn't make much sense usually. I also think your layout could use some work, the colors are very bright, and it makes it hard to read without getting a headache. I think this story has a lot of potential!

@ xXcrazy-desiXx
Thank you! i'm working on more. should be up soon.

good chapter your geting better at writeing :) poor travis i feel for him love can be amazeing or deadly... poor allie it so sad how her parents treat her... no one should be put down for wanting to fallow their dreams well i liked the chapter :)

@ xXcrazy-desiXx
yes working on it.

Hey I was wondering if you are going to post anymore?

From a comment swap - I don't know anything about Nitro. But overall, it's a decent story with a lot of potential. The layout though, is too bright. Kind of hurt my eyes. The colors don't mix very well together.
I also noticed some spelling errors. If you possibly got a beta this story could be great!
Keep up the good work though m'dear.

HIYA I'm from comment swap thingy so I don't really know any thing about Nitro but I thought it was really good story. there just a few little errors here and there like spelling and a few punctuation not that I can rally say to much on that because I'm still working on getting better at it. wow her parents are really messed up and it sad that she tried to kill herself.
it kind of crazy the things you find out about people when something bad happens it like everyone emotions are so high they start blurting thing out. her mother had no right to try and take her back, and awe Travis is so cute how he worried so much about her. but any who i think this is still a really good story. :)

@ xXSainXx
thank you. I've been addicted to Nitro for a while.

From Comment swap~

The first thing I seemed to notice was some spelling errors. I'm not all great with punctuation and such which I'm actually slightly improving, but I can the lack of it in this story.
But the story is pretty good. The mother seems horrible for doing that to Allie. I only seen a few episodes of Nitro Circus so I don't know to much about it. But overall with a little help on your story I'm sure it will be a success. :)

@ carriesometimes
Welcome!!!! if you would like to know more about nitro and what they do got to youtube.com and search Nitro Cicrus or Travis Pastrana. thank you for the comment. i'm still trying to get a beta!

hello,I'm here from comment swap. I came into this story knowing absoulty nothing about anything to do with it,as I'm not a fan of Nitro. That being said,I thought your story was good. There were a few small problems, like run on sentences, grammar, periods,but nothing that couldnt be fixed with a Beta or anything. :) Besides that,I think with a little help your story could be even better. :)

@ HeardItOnTheRadio
what do u think of it so far?

It's completely fine! I was just saying that's really cool and weird at the same time.

@ HeardItOnTheRadio
i'm sorry i just really like the name and the birthday was close to TPs' B-day

Okay so I haven't even started this yet and I'm already weirded out. My name (swear to god) is Allie (spelled the exact same way) and my birthday is September 14...

@ Professor Snape thanks for the advice. i'm gonna get my friend to beta it when she can. her past in coming soon.

The best advice that I can give you is to revise this piece of writing. There are a lot of grammatical errors: spelling mistake, lack of punctuation etc,.

This is a very interesting story idea and her mother is so harsh for doing that, I would love to know why and how all of this happened.

You can find a Beta over in the writing section of the forums or maybe advertise in the Blogs if you're looking for a helping hand.

This story could have good potential but you'll need to sort out the grammar.

Good luck with it!