August 10th, 2008 at 11:35am
So I'm a total loser and a lame reviewer, so I'm doing both Round Round and Prepare to Play. :XD
I love the metaphors you used. They were brilliant, original, and very descriptive. Gerard's state of mind when he's alone was described perfectly, I knew exactly how he felt, what it was like for him to feel that way.
Frank's appearance at the door, the way he started his conversation with Gerard told a lot about how much he worried that Mikey was angry at him. Switching onto how alike Mikey and Gerard are, makes the reader that much more aware of their bond, their closeness, as well, which is brilliant.
The idea for the game made me laugh, it's so typical for Frank to come up with something like that. It was remarkable how much that changed Gerard's mood - even if he didn't feel like it at first.
And I'm very much looking forward to what they're going to do to get Mikey provoked :XD
Gerard and Mikey's conversation was incredibly realistic. I can definitely see them talk to each other like that, on the same topic and all. Moreover, it reminded me of my own siblings again - just like the prologue - which is a really good sign. Their bond in this story is as strong as it seems to be in real life. I love seeing pictures of them together, or vids, because their brotherly love is so strong. They have this strange effect on me, and they do as well in this story. Much kudos to you for being able to get that feeling into the story. :cute:
Gerard dragging Mikey out of his room was priceless. It just cracked me up. Again, I can really see them doing stuff like that. :lmfao
And zeh Way Brothers showering together? I bet that gives a lot of girls nice dreams.
I know it takes me ages to read and somewhat review this, but I still love this story a hella lot. :tehe:
And I apologise for short, shitty reviews, I'm lame and lazy. :XD
The beginning kind of shocked and enthralled me - how Gerard seemed to be violating him and Mikey had this crazy wide smile that scared even Gerard into kissing it away, but it wouldn't. It was eerie and haunting in an insane sort of way,and I dunno if you intended it but it reminded me of the Joker in the comics - the one with the permanent grin.
Your sheer talent shined through in the next paragraphs, like this which really struck me:
Heart continuing to fill up, lungs ripped to shreds and head decapitated I kept going; fingers, lips, words all violating Mikey; bruising his being into one massive pulp of red and purple.
That's what made it so nightmarish, the wording and the ghastly color of the description, so violent and so so brilliant.
Mikey wasn’t insane like his big brother.
For some reason, that was a really great comparison.
“Are you. Are you okay?” Monotone voice dulled to erase any traces of emotions, elimination any clues.
There was some irony here, since the way the first two words were repeated betrayed a stutter, or nervousness, of emotion.
The image from the dream refused to leave my retinas; it was seared to my eyes.
Creative way of saying he couldn't forget it. Hehe.
Smoke stung in my nostrils and clawed liquid and salt from my eyes.
I am sooooooooooooooooooooo jealous of this. A perfect way to describe tears!
And Frank's game. Stupid Frank. Look at what you've done. :XD
Certainly worth the wait, Rose.
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