First, I'd like to say that this entry has a very good plot. And the characters' backgrounds just add to it. But there were a lot of major typos. Some that took a while to understand. Also, it took me until the end of the flashback to realize it was...well...a flashback. Try to add a little more of a hint next time. The story seemed to speed by really fast. Too fast. Or, at least that's the impression I got, but I could barely understand the ending because of all the typos. Don't get me wrong, I understood the main points, like the fact that he kissed her, she kissed back, he said April Fools, and she ran away, but it just seemed to be all jumbled up. The prank idea was very interesting though, and I still enjoyed reading it. :)
June 2nd, 2011 at 03:46am