I think in the summary the first line is a bit too wordy. You don't have to introduce the character's full name like you did, it kind of makes it feel less inviting as a story or more like an obituary in the newspaper. Saying simply: Elizabeth becomes mute after seeing her twin brother, James, commit suicide.
Also there's a typo in the summary as well. I think it should be: Like, eventually, it will...
Also, as for the layout, it's kind of hard to read because when you scroll the words move onto the photo and I can't see the words, so you might want to move the photo so that it moves with the text.
There's a typo in the second paragraph: "If that's what you want, Ellie." I could hear the grin in my brother;s voice as he pushed me from behind, causing my swing to fly through the air. We knew 16 was too old to play on swings, but we did it anyway. - brother's
I would just look through the chapter, reading it aloud helps with typos otherwise it's a good start :)
Elizabeth becomes mute after seeing her twin brother, James, commit suicide.
Also there's a typo in the summary as well. I think it should be:
Like, eventually, it will...
Also, as for the layout, it's kind of hard to read because when you scroll the words move onto the photo and I can't see the words, so you might want to move the photo so that it moves with the text.
There's a typo in the second paragraph:
"If that's what you want, Ellie." I could hear the grin in my brother;s voice as he pushed me from behind, causing my swing to fly through the air. We knew 16 was too old to play on swings, but we did it anyway. - brother's
I would just look through the chapter, reading it aloud helps with typos otherwise it's a good start :)