Shadows in the Woods - Comments

As a stand alone drabble, this seems a little bland and ultimately, it falls flat. It has a lot of potential, and with extra chapters to add detail and plot, I could see this evolving into something extraordinarily entertaining to read. However, even as a stand alone, I want to commend you for having a beautiful, vivid writing style. Your imagery was wonderful, and your sense of word choice is simply gorgeous.

This could really turn into an interesting story, but as a stand-alone, it is decent. I like the writing, you are great with your descriptions. I love the way you share the character's feelings and emotions so well. I hope that you continue to add to this and make it into a longer story, I'd like to know what happened. Still, great story and great writer! :)

First off, your writing is impressive. You write really well in the first person and your sentence structure and vocab and grammar are very good. This is an interesting set up. As a short story though, it isn't really all it could be. It sounds much more like a beginning of something to me and I would consider expanding this and continuing because I'd love to know more about it.

I think as a stand alone story it is kind of boring. But, if you added as a chapter in a larger story it would be much more interesting! I think you had a lot of good descriptions and you described the main character's feelings really well. Overall, I think it is beautifully written!

I love it so far. The words flow together wonderfully. Its really interesting and i would love to see how it fits into a longer story, its very gripping and you build tension well also i really love the last line. I hope you post more in the future, i would love to see what happens :-)