Prayer - Comments

Omg, even though this was short, i loved every part of it... Gosh, you're an evil genius. Im surprised no one calls you jigsaw as well :)

Holy shit...O.o
Though it was a bit creepy, I still loved it :D
I tend to read crime related drabbles byt this is by far the best I've read.

"Where is your God now?"

Ok, I love that line. It's my favorite line out of the whole drabble <33
I love the description you gave and goodness, it was just amazing. Though it was short, it said a lot. And I mean a lot.
Amazing job <333

Holy crap. This was amazing. I mean, yeah, don't get me wrong, it terrified the crap out of me, but damn, it amazed the mess out of me while doing so. That's some serious skill, for realllll.<3 I think I'm in love with your writing style, missy. You always have a way of completely blind siding me with these lovely short stories of yours. It's like, I come in with this mindset. This game, this idea. I start reading and try and predict what happens because surely, you can't be amazing and surprise me allllll the time, right? But you can and you do.<3 You surprise me each and every single time I read something by you, and like I said, especially these short stories. I swear, if you're not published soon, I'm going to explode. You most definitely deserve to become famous and be published and make millions and live in this awesomesauce flavored penthouse. (: <3

But enough about how amaizng you are, gigglys. Let's get to a subtopic just under that - how amazing this story is, too! (Because sooner or later you'll have to accept that you're amazing all around. (; )

This piece had so many amazing points,but, I think my all around favorite was how you used something dainty and tiny as a weapon of mass destruction. Literally. It's not over dramatic, I promise, haha. It really and truly has meaning, especially for this story.(: I'm not talking world shattering....well, maybe I am - for this dead person, at least. Not only has this little girl probably demolished this person's view on innocence and little people being kind and sweet, she broke their religious views.

Where is God at now?

It's something alot of people ask. And not many can answer. But in some odd, vauge way, you do answer. In a slightly violent way, and I use slightly loosely aha, this sums my view on God, almost. Not so cruel, but really, "You can't believe in what you can't see." Or something like that. :) Anyways, this was really awesome. I mean, I have a few questions, like, Why was she killing them, or why was she obviously so angry, but not knowing the answers to those won't kill me or the awesomeness of this story. <3 It's really amazing. I love your mind, your details - basically, I love you, cause you're amazing, k? (: <3

I hope to read more loveliness from you, tooo. :) <3

Fabulous. Absolutely, wonderfully, revoltingly, fantastic. It was short, but straightforward. The dark, mystical aura you crafted throughout was so stunning.

“…the sickening crack of bones hidden by the murmurs of London.” That was a gory, gorgeous line. I totally felt the crack, heard it, and I could feel the hushed mumbles of the city… Perfectly imaginable. And the last line… Clever. Really, truly, clever. And relatable. I feel that way all the time. When I truly need him, God’s never there. That’s why I don’t really believe in God. But I have to. Family, y’know.

:O Sorry to ramble. But, yeah, anyway, fantastic piece.

This was sickening. In a fabulous way, of course. This is the kind of freaky shit I love reading. I love the demonic power this chick seemed to have over her victims! I love how she questioned why all of her victims pleaded for something and she said that nothing ever came for them. This really was stunning. Fantastic job. <33

/the sickening crack of bones hidden by the murmurs of London./ That could be like, a narration during an episode of BBC's Sherlock. Lovely.

This was very good. I like the way you mixed dialogue with detail. The snapping of a neck must sound horrible. I really think this was a class "A" drabble about murder. It sounded like a murderer, like a crazy one. (:

Woot, woot, woot. This was STUNNING.

Holy shit, Jazzy, do you have a latent murderer in your head? Totally kidding, but I won't lie - this freaked me the fuck out. I watch a few too many crime shows, honestly, but this...you really humanize the heartlessness of this girl and how she kills her victim with little to no compassion at all; especially how she uses God against her victim, who's possibly a believer, it seems. It's mind-numbing if you think about it, how humans can be so cruel and awful and disgusting and heartless. I could honestly imagine this clearly in my head like a movie - and that's honestly the both amazing and scary part. Amazing how you describe everything and how you really put both the murderer and victim's feelings and emotions into the reader's face and scary as to how real this whole scenario really is. It happens everyday, and we can't stop it. Yikes >.< Anyways, this was freakin' amazing and it's nothing short of a masterpiece. Be proud of this, Jazzy :D Lovely jobbb <3333