Annabelle - Comments

i had it all pretty and spaced out in google docs but mibba wouldnt let me change it and i think ill try to edit it more thanks guys for the comments. and for taking your time to read through all my spelling mistakes

First of all, I would suggest editing anything before putting it on the internet. Secondly you need to space out your paragraphs, its a mibba rule and you could get reported if you don't. Also it makes it look like a giant wall of text and that's rather intimidating for the reader.

On the other hand this was a lovely idea. You are very talented and I enjoyed reading this, I only got half way through before my eyes got tired, you might want to find about splitting it into two parts. But I did enjoy what I read, Sadie J. Blue xxx

I've heard this song before! I whisper the first part randomly throughout out the day (:
I like it. A lot. It gives a way deeper meaning to a song. Now every time I hear the song I'll think of this story! Its great, just that its all scrunched up together. It'd be a lot easier to read if you put a spaces in between each paragraph..
*spelled right wrong where annabelle talks about when her dad died.

Hey there, I really like the idea behind this and I really like the layout you've chosen and the way you've used a song to help you with the story, I really do think this story has great potential, I'm going to recommend this story!