Party All Night Until They Call The Cops - Comments

This is pretty late, but I just wanted to tell you that I fucking loved the way you ended this.
I'm actually a HUGE fan of surprise endings, especially ones as fucked up as this, so yeah, I really liked it. And really, man, I didn't see it coming for shit!
Also, it was really surprising how Kristyn was pregnant with Johnny's baby.
But now I feel like there are so many unanswered questions! What was up with the dude that was wearing Charlie's clothes? Who the fuck is this Kristyn chick and why did she end up so crazy? And of course, how can the band possibly continue after this?
That's why I'd really fucking love for you to write a follow-up story to this. Not only because I'm not ready for the story to end, but because I think there soooo much more you can do with it. Put simply, you've got a wonderfully creative mind & I wanna see you put it to get use.
So yes, please write more! I would definitely read the shit out of it! <3

Chapter 1 - It's a bit too short for my liking and I think it should be in the summary rather than the first chapter. But, the part you mentioned that J-Dog likes to pay for hookers for unknown reasons just makes me laugh. I don't know why but it makes me laugh.

Chapter 2 - This chapter made me smile. It's so J3T. ^_^

Chapter 3 - Again, for unknown reason I laughed. This time when J3T suddenly screamed when they were in the hospital. And the cliffhanger at the end of the chapter is a nice hook to make me wonder what exactly happened.

Chapter 4 - Aww... the guys are just nice. Charlie just seemed kinda calm even though he knew someone was pretending to be him. If it were me, I know I'd at least scream and kick around. But, that's because I have short temper.

Chapter 5 - Erm... it's a bit unrealistic. For one, they don't just meet a random girl who's been beaten up on the street and take her on tour with them. But, well, it's what keeps this story moving.

Chapter 6 - I have nothing to say on this chapter.

Chapter 7 - That's a nice twist.

Chapter 8 - Wow, Johnny sure was calm even though he'd just found out he'd made a girl pregnant.

Chapter 9 - She killed herself? Wow!

General - I find it weird that you use their stage name in the story. I think it'll be more realistic if they use their real name when they're interacting with one another. It's okay if they use their stage name among their fans. Until the end of the story, I'm wondering who's the guy that pretended to be Charlie. I'm sorry, but I think this story is flat. It has no real plot or whatever. But, you are a good writer. I mean, I don't find any major grammar or spelling mistakes and you can go far. Just keep on writing.

Gosh, I feel like the worst commenter in the history. I like this story and I think it has potential. I'm just a bit disappointed with the ending and there are just too many loose threads. I'm going to stop now. Anyway, I'm not trying to be mean.

Wow. I must say, that I have only ever heard a few songs by them because my younger brother absolutely loves them, and they aren't all that bad of a band I must say :)

Your story on the other hand I love :) It was in your face and to the point and I like that! Your descriptions were amazing, and that girl, I don't know how I feel about her! LOL! She killed herself! I was not expecting that, not at all, but I enjoyed this :) Keep up the amazing work!

Your doing a wonderful job, deary.
Even if they're short, I feel like all the chapters have a lot drama and really good interaction between the chapters. Plus, this shit with Charlie and Kristen is totally intriguing! It's just weird how, at first, someone beat her up that was wearing his clothes and now it seems like they've got something going on...?
But that's why I like this story! It really gets you thinking, man. Plus, I like how each chapter reveals a little more.
Tbh, I fucking love this story. And I can't wait to see what happens next! <3

Sorry for the late comment but...
I'm speechless and that is definitely a good thing.
This story is EPIC and I love it! I'm not into Hollywood Undead but I think I might just have to check them out because of this story. It gets more and more dramatic each chapter and that excites me. And that Johnny guy makes me crack up, he's funny. I like him xD
I love your writing style and I shall be following this. Great job ;)
I'm absolutely hooked, I need a update!

I really love this story:)
Update soon.

i love this!! im a HUGE fan of HU they're #1 in my life <3 awesome story i think you captured their lives very well

First off I'm not a fan of Hollywood Undead (but I'm sure I will be since my friend plays them all the time -_- )
But this is the first Hollywood Undead fic I read and honesty I like it. I really like the layout it goes long with the story. And the way you describe everything goes really well. And like everyone else I like the concept, it shows their big parties but still care for each other.
I'm a little hook on this and I will be reading more :)

Before this, I had yet to come across as decent HU-fic.
I really like the concept of it, it shows that they're big partiers.
I want to see what goes down and who did that to the girl.
I do, however, think it went a bit quick but that's all good.

Good job so far. :)

Fantastic update, dear. :)
I'm actually really surprised they asked the girl to come with them, cuz of the whole thing with Charlie Scene. I mean, I don't think he actually did it, but there's obviously some crazy shit going on here since a chick got attacked and he was wearing Charlie Scene's clothes. Like honestly, I'd be afraid of what's gonna happen once they're out on tour.
But that's why it's fucking awesome! Seriously, dude, I'm jazzed as fuck to see what kind of shit goes down and how this mystery attack thing ties into the storyline.
Plus, I have to say, your writing has grown sooooo much since some of your earlier work. I remember reading that Johnny Christ story and thinking it was really good, but you can definitely see the changes in the way you describe things, the interactions between characters, etc.
So yeah, keep up the good work, doll! And please update soon! <3

well, I haven't seen any good Hollywood Undead stories on here.
I liked the intro, how it was in past tense. I like how the intro leads you on..wondering what the story will be about.
I really liked it and one of the better HU stories (:

Wow, doll, I love this already!
I mean, I'm not a huge fan of HU, but when I'm reading a story, I could care less about the famous characters or any shit like that. The main thing about writing is painting a scene, invoking a certain feeling, and getting the reader to connect to the storyline... and darling, that's exactly what you've done! Only four chapters in and I'm already fucking absorbed into the story, haha.
Seriously, though, it's awesome.
For one thing, I love the way you describe the guys as having that whole "sleep all day, party & fuck all night" rockstar persona. Scandalous, but very intriguing. :D
Plus, this whole shit with the girl who says she was attacked by Charlie Scene, then you find out it wasn't him at all! I was like WHAT? Wtf is going on here!? But that's why I love it. At the beginning of the story, you think it's gonna be another "day in the life of a rockstar" type of thing, but then you find out there's an entirely different element that really sets it apart from others. Seriously, I think it's amazing!
So you better write more soon, okay!? I really wanna see what happens next! :)

I've never heard of Hollywood undead before, but because of this story, I'm looking them up right now.
I like the story so far and the twist at the end of chapter 2. I defiinately think you should continue this because I wanna know what happens! I'm subscribing (: