Whoa that was not subtle at all in a good way lol. The direct approach you took to telling the end was some how more impacting than if you had dragged it out with details and such... I imagine it in my head like a whole new car wreck like the second the girl was like car wreck died on impact I thought in my head car ramming in to heart dies on impact. I also really like the lay out which seems to intensify the good mood but then also be a juxtaposition to the end and over all theme.
I kinda want it to be centered and for the picture to also appear in the chapter header but I still think as far as the story itself it's great and sort of refreshing from what I'm use to.
I kinda want it to be centered and for the picture to also appear in the chapter header but I still think as far as the story itself it's great and sort of refreshing from what I'm use to.