First Comes Love - Comments

Okay, so I noticed that you didn't use the brand name but the URL was a bit distracting I would have preferred that you just described everything.
As far as the actual story, lol a little irresponsible much??
:P

woah @ the last update >.<

Wow! Just wow. Frankly, I've been disappointed by Mibba lately, but I really enjoyed this story.
A little bit of constructive critique? You used a lot of brand names. I don't really care what kind of car she was driving or that they were listening to Kesha. In fact, it distracted from the story because I felt like it was almost product placement. I know it wasn't your intention, but it came across that way. Also, the clothes. Personally, I feel like if it isn't worth actually writing out in your story, it doesn't matter what they're wearing. The pictures felt a little lazy.
However, the party was described very well and I could visualize it easily. The people sound authentic. I'm curious about what this "mean girl" is going to do to get revenge and how Brooklyn is going to deal with the fact she slept with Collin. I think, in her position, I would dwell on it way too much and probably drive myself crazy, haha.
I'm going to subscribe and I look forward to reading more =)

This is ... interesting. intense but interesting. *subscribes*