Better off as Lovers - Comments

  • Bree Ross

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    sohep amde me laugh witht he whole pete at the saloon thingy.
    haha.
    March 30th, 2007 at 10:10pm
  • S Chizzle x0

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    thanks =]
    March 30th, 2007 at 01:24am
  • Bree Ross

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    =D
    wow.
    everyday theres a billion more updates!
    its really really good.
    poor bren!
    poor sohep!
    MOOOOOOORE
    March 29th, 2007 at 10:11pm
  • Bree Ross

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    =]
    haha thannnnnnnnnnks.
    greatgreatgreat update =]
    more soon?
    March 29th, 2007 at 12:33am
  • S Chizzle x0

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    thanks i'm flattered =] i lurve your icon by the way. it made me laugh :lol:
    March 27th, 2007 at 03:01am
  • Bree Ross

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    =D
    wowers
    lota of updateS!
    love it!
    YAY FOR SOHEP AND BREN!
    MORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRe
    March 27th, 2007 at 02:16am
  • Bree Ross

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    pooor soheppppppp.
    i have a bad feeling about this alex.
    LOL
    MORRRRRRRRRRRRE.
    March 25th, 2007 at 09:14pm
  • Bree Ross

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    awwwwwww.
    love it but its sad!
    MRE MORE MORE!
    March 24th, 2007 at 05:32pm
  • Bree Ross

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    =D
    i LOVE this!
    UUUPPPDAATTTE!
    March 23rd, 2007 at 01:06am
  • Technophile

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    This story has great potential.

    The only advice I would give you is that you should properly format your paragraphs: When you have a new speaker in dialogue then you should create a new paragraph.

    Example:
    "Hi, said Bob. "Hello," said Sally.

    Should read:
    "Hi," said Bob.
    "Hello," said Sally.

    Not only is it proper grammar but it also eases any confusion that might occur on the readers part. (:
    March 17th, 2007 at 05:44am
  • Monochrome Crayola

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    //<=]]
    I read it over again.
    'Tis even better the second time.
    March 9th, 2007 at 07:52pm
  • Monochrome Crayola

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    Awww....
    =']
    This story is sooo cute!
    Write more....
    Now...
    March 4th, 2007 at 09:51pm
  • Lothrop.

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    I LOVE YOUR STORY KEEP ON WRITING!
    February 28th, 2007 at 06:59pm
  • nicole; sock ownage.

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    This is really good so far! :D
    More soon!
    February 26th, 2007 at 02:55am
  • Lothrop.

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    OMG I LIKE LOVE THIS STORY IT'S SOOOO GOOD! KEEP WRITING LUV YA ALWAYS AND 4-EVA U KNOW WHO! :D
    February 25th, 2007 at 10:42pm