The Princess And The Stones - Comments

Chapter 5

"Simon nodded and tossedly his cousin's wavy blonde hair."
^ tasseled?

"and like he'd down to her early"
^ done

"A bit of a paniced expression"
^ panicked

OH MY GOSH! I never would have guessed! SIMON LOVES HER!!! <3 <3 That's a major twist on things and, to be honest, he is my favorite character. ('cause I started liking him since chapter 2 >.>)

And, I forgot it was her birthday XD I feel the same way about the morning time as she does--morning should be shot in the head with a burning hot bullet! lol

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AWWWW, I just totally loved the way you opened this chapter up! It gave us an insight on what M and C are like and it makes me hope that they stay within the story! <3

Moraca seems like Maria's fairy-godmother, except, in a motherly type of way. It makes me want to die from all the cuteness <3

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So, in light of me being absent, it's time for me to give you that review I promised =D

Chapter 2

"As always, Simon only managed to received a few specks of dust"
^ I think you meant receive

"In the centre of the was"
^ center? =)

""Mum?" Maria asked, as watch"
^ as she watched

" lost herself in though"
^ thought

"As they three"
^ the instead of they

Iliana seems like such a sweet and funny child. Honestly, though, I'm with Maria on the whole marriage subject--'tis not for me XD I really think Simon seems so adorable. I'd love to have a brother like him.

The way you have made her be in an adoptive family and how she 'forgot' her past ;) is major brilliant. I can't wait to see what happens next~!!

Chapter 3

"Maria whispered a tiny pray"
^ prayer

For some odd-ball reason, Petah reminds me of Gustan from Beauty and the Beast--I've always hated Gustan >.>

Anywho, I think this Victoria character should be slapped across the face half a dozen times or so.-_-
Poor Maria, I hope she isn't forced to run away to escape the guards. After working so hard to be in the family, it would be a shame.

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The layout is adorable :) I love it. I ove the story. Most of all I love your description. It really painted a picture. To be honest that was one of the things that glued me to the story. :) It was very interesting and I loved it.

This story reminds me of what I used to dream of when I was in 4th grade! Nice job! One thing that was hard for me to read was the balance. It went so fast, then slow. Just remember to try to keep it even. Awesome job though!(:

I agree that you have a great balance of different components here. And I like the way you put a fresh spin on some of the mystical creatures. Quite often we get things so ingrained in our heads that it's hard to put a new spin on them, but you've done just that.

I also like the length of the chapters. It feels like I'm actually reading a proper chapter in a story.
Great work =D

First I gotta say
I love your layout dear
It's very beautiful

Now onto your story
I love how you wrote this
Having a good mix between dialogue and descriptions
I also do love your Prologue too, not too long not too short, just right

It's very interesting to say the least
I thought it was gonna be something totally different
I can't wait to see more from you
Also can't wait to see how this ends

Keep up the good work
<3

Ooooo, I like this chapter! I love how you started with action and then kept up the amazing-ness throughout the chapter. I don't think you should feel bad about this chapter; it is just as awesome as the other two, if not better. Keep it up! <3

Oh, and thanks for the mention <3 You didn't have to do that <3

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This is an interesting story. :) It's well written and very funny. Lol. Yea, somethings seem funny to me when they're not supposed to be but that's just me. ^_^

The layout is very cute and the story goes along with it very well. Your writing is highly detailed and just amazing to just read along to.

The layout suits the story very much. The language you used in it, very beautiful and your descriptive langauge is outstanding. I love it so far. :)

Pink has never interested me much, but your layout pulls itself together and looks very cute. =D

I love fantasies, so I was really drawn into the story just by the summary alone. I've long since enjoyed fictions that involved a princesses and the fairies. Sorry, enough of my rambling...

The prologue reminded me of a movie. I think it was enticing and it really made me picture the events clearly with your detailing. The last paragraph is what I liked the best. It really brought the whole story into the light and makes the reader(me) want to find out exactly what her story is going to be like. =D

The first chapter is.... AMAZING! Love, really, you are very grand at storytelling. I love how you have the character's so realistic despite them being mythical creatures and all. The names are pretty cool. I haven't heard anything like that before. The ending really makes me want to read more of this wonderful story of yours! Please do update soon, love! I'm subbing! <3

I love it!!

Wow, I must admit I had my doubts when I started to read this. I just never really liked this kind of story... Well, until now.

It's beautiful, really. And you pull it off, too. The way you write it makes it even more believable and I'll definitely be reading more!

The story line is excellent, and so original. I can't wait to see what happens next.

You have such a cute layout; with the pink hearts and what not - really, it sets the mood to the entire story quite well.

The story idea and plot is actually quite original, and it's amazing how you've made them fairies and not, well, humans. Engaged at twelve? My oh my, who wouldn't run away?

You've made Essie out into such a strong headed, strong willed and stubborn girl and that makes me smile. There's nothing like rebelliousness in a fairy princess to stir things up, right? (:

This is a cute story, one that I would reccommend to my friends to read.