My Golden Child - Comments

Oh gosh, this was absolutely beautiful. There were so many things that I loved while reading this that it's difficult for me to separate them all out. First off, I really enjoyed the plot in itself, the idea of this little fluffy dog becoming this little girl's entire world was just beyond heartwarming, and even through all of the obstacles that they both had to overcome, they still had each other. Going deeper into the writing itself, I loved the format in which you chose to tell their story, with the section of third person narrative followed by the main character's thoughts and emotions elaborating on that. I'd never really seen those two points-of-view mixed in the same piece before, and I have to say that I thought it was a brilliant way of thoroughly telling the story. I also really liked all of the raw emotion in this piece, how every moment was very high-stakes, and I thought that kind of pushed me to read more.

Um, I honestly don't really have much to say in the form of constructive criticism. If I dig in the depths of my mind for something, I guess I could say that the writing got a little tedious at times, though it's not something I would change just because it gives that raw effect. So I guess I'm kinda just rambling and grasping at straws XD

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this story, though it honestly did make me tear up a little. I think you did an amazing job of going above and beyond just the photo prompt and really making this story your own and putting your own twist on everything. This was an amazing piece, and I appreciate you writing this for my contest.=D