Birds - Comments

  • song.of.the.stars

    song.of.the.stars (200)

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    So, this story left me with a lot of strange feelings. The first actual part of the story where it talks about eating wallpaper was creepy, and then it just kept getting creepier. At the end it seemed to even itself out, but I was still left with a lot of questions. I suppose the story was meant to leave the reader wanting more, so I'm sure all you read this got something different out of it which is good. The story content was reallly good though, it was different from anything I have read. Grammar was also really good, seeing how you wrote only short bits at a time it kept your grammar in good standing because it isn't that hard to mess up grammar with a one or two sentence phrase. The layout was pretty, the only thing I wasn't a fan of was the large flower border. It was distracting and I found myself looking at that more than the actual story. Overall I think you wrote a wonderful story. It was intriguing and made me think and left me with questions. You did an excellent job with this story and I really really enjoyed it.
    June 13th, 2011 at 07:18pm
  • belaruska

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    This is just so beautiful.
    I love how nothing is explained and the reader has to make assumptions.
    The best thing I've read in a while <3.
    May 31st, 2011 at 12:56am