Promises We Meant to Make - Comments

Ah! I love it! The banner is so pretty and goes so nicly with the background of the lay out. :)

Charleswood, Ohio was the epitome of a boring city. This is my favorite sentence in the whole story to be honest, It drew me in and forced me to keep reading from there.

The summery was brilant, I loved that as well. It made me exicted to read. Which is a very good thing on your part. I love this story and I hope you keep writing it. :)

This story is incredibly... fluffy. What can I say? It's an endearing love story filled with tension and awkward encounters. The foreshadowing you mentioned having worked on is very blatant, so congrats on that. I sort of like the friendship between Alina and Nathan and how honest it is, and the way they speak to each other is very real. There's nothing out of tune in the dialogue; usually in a romantic story, it's very forced and you can tell. This story unrolls naturally and I like that. Keep writing, and thanks for the FB like!

I really enjoy this. The characters seem very real to me.

The summary was flawless and it pulled me in, making me want to read more. I just thought it was awesome.

The time jump kind of startled me. I don't know why it did. But you pulled it off very well.

I kind of wish Henry and Alina were together, but that's just me :)

All in all, I really love this. So I'm going to subscribe.

I really enjoy this. The characters seem very real to me.

The summary was flawless and it pulled me in, making me want to read more. I just thought it was awesome.

The time jump kind of startled me. I don't know why it did. But you pulled it off very well.

I kind of wish Henry and Alina were together, but that's just me :)

All in all, I really love this. So I'm going to subscribe.

I like how Henry tends to act different around Alina than he is when we see his thoughts. It's kinda like he's keeping their friendship in order to ease his pain about something else. That's why she was much more important than the what's-her-face he slept with.

I can see why Henry and Alina don't have that kind of relationship, they don't need it. Although, sometimes I kinda wish they did.

"Besides, I prefer fiction. I get to control what happens. I'm never startled by my own endings, and it's like having your own little world.”

I hugely agree.
Only, I partly disagree. There are times when I'm very much startled by my own endings.... Such as in stories where it would be somewhat stereotypical and no doubt, one person or the other would win... But it always ends up being the one person no one expects.

Haha sorry.
But yes this was just beautiful. You're an amazing writer... And though the drinking and weed accentuated the story, I could never write about it, which makes you that much better. <3 Good job.

"Besides, I prefer fiction. I get to control what happens. I'm never startled by my own endings, and it's like having your own little world.”

I could really agree with what Henry was saying, and I love his character. Man, I honestly don't know where to start...and that's a good thing. I thought the first chapter was very well-written and beautifully done in a way that was easy to get a feel of the characters. I liked Henry a lot because he's perfect and also not perfect. He knows his flaws, but still stays confident enough to like who he is. I adore characters, especially male characters with that type of trait. The first chapter was described wonderfully, you created the essence of high school parties pretty good. I've graduate high school in 2009 and while reading this made me think of all my senior parties and just the parties in general, so good job on that. You have a nice style that flows well and I could tell you know what you're doing as a writer who wants to create this image with her words...and you are doing just that. I'm excited about Henry and Eric's little sister's relationship, I think it's blossoming into something beautiful already.

You are a excellent writer! I'm subscribing, this story is the most amazing piece of work that I've ever seen come out of Mibba. You are very, very talented and you should continue.

I too am glad i read your journal.

I don't really know what to say either.

This is incredible.

I'm not good at this, :(

But honestly you are an excellent writer.

Wow...
Wow...
I can't find anything else to say, other than I want to know what happens next.
Wow...
Sorry my comment isn't as helpful as the person ahead of me, but I truly do like the characters and the plot and wow, it's just really good.
I glad I read your journal!

I really like this, your descriptions are great and I like the characters you've come up with. They seem real, unlike some authors make them. They're not all perfect, you know what I mean. I felt bad for Alina, it always sucks to be the obvious one *le sigh*.

I dunno about Alina in the second chapter. If I had a boyfriend who kept distracting me, I would dump his sorry ass because writing is my life. Okay, so I'm reading this as I comment and I just found out she's not his girlfriend. Well poo. I mean it's good 'cause he's not cheating on her but poo because I thought they were together. Ah well, on to the next wonderfully written chapter.

Uhm, the third part repeats itself, I don't know if there's more on the repeating one, but I stopped when I read "attatch message" So yeah. Anyway, I like that Alina didn't freak out or anything because of Lizzie although the girl was a bitch. I really like this story and can't wait to read more. (: