The Monster Under My Bed - Comments

Judging for “So You Think You Can Write?”:

10/10 for Originality
This was good…I liked that at the end she compares herself to the monster under her bed when she was little.

5/5 for Quality
Good job…good quality.

13/15 for Following Prompt
I was kinda confused on how the story met the prompt…I understand the whole, “it takes (a monster) to know (a monster)”, but I’m not sure how that translated besides seeing the monster in the mirror at the end.

10/10 for Capturing My Attention
The picture caught my attention, but I’m not sure how it fits in with the story…? I’m not taking off points for that, though.

9/10 for Spelling/Grammar/Vocab
I’m a real stickler for grammar, and I caught a few mistakes. Also, you should have two “enters” between paragraphs so that it’s easier to read…but that’s your style, so that’s okay. :)

Total Points: 47 points from Moonlit.Memories for Round One
(Note: I’m not adding bonuses for word count/comments/etc. because I’m not sure what aquarius plans on doing with that…just so you know.)

This story is pretty amazing. I like how you use the figurative monster as an actual monster. Also, that the little girl seems innocent and the older girl is a bitch and the monster.

I really like this, it's different. I like how you keep the monster under wraps as she grows and when she doesn't expect it, it's always there, just lurking behind her.<3 Good job! :D