She Quenched My Thirst - Comments

  • forever_free

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    I love this story! I love Stella's personality, reading this story was awesome so update as soon as possible!
    September 24th, 2012 at 11:48am
  • Karina_DeLun

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    Please continue! Stella is so awesome! XD lol of only she were in the actual books its just what they need!<3!
    March 25th, 2012 at 12:10am
  • StiltzScreamsRemedy

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    Update soon... Please? D;
    March 15th, 2012 at 08:56am
  • jordancresentmoon

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    Love it! Keep going, please! =)
    October 13th, 2011 at 03:19am
  • Marissa.Motionless

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    I LOOOOVE IT! There isn't enough Jasper and OC stories, and this one is truley amazing!
    September 4th, 2011 at 07:02am
  • Stab The Rainbow

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    Update soon! c:
    September 1st, 2011 at 04:26pm
  • heyit'sjordan_

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    i absolutely loooooooooove this story!
    please update soon?<3
    August 17th, 2011 at 01:16am
  • GeneralAwesomeness

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    You know I'm addicted. I really am. But where's the Jasper love? This is supposed to be a love story and he's been basically MIA for the past couple chapters. :) other than that I loooooove it thiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiis much!
    August 7th, 2011 at 04:10am
  • forever_ends

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    I love it!!
    August 6th, 2011 at 11:13pm
  • StiltzScreamsRemedy

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    I can't wait to see how everyone reacts to the baby :3 <3 Good update.
    July 22nd, 2011 at 11:41pm
  • Error-00

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    I would totally join that conga line.
    I AM HERE! I DIDN'T GO ANYWHERE! I've just been working hard on my latest chapter haha
    July 22nd, 2011 at 09:59pm
  • JennyQ96

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    Woo! I just read it! I love love LOVE it ! <3 :D Update soon !!!!
    July 22nd, 2011 at 03:49am
  • JennyQ96

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    Okay I just started reading this story... I am SO distracted by the amazing background XD
    July 22nd, 2011 at 01:58am
  • LifesJustMyCupOfTea

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    To tell you the truth, neither am I a true Twilight fan. I also have read the books and was forced to watch all the movies but it really didn't go for me. But I did read you story and found it really good.
    The title suits the story very nicely. Your idea and plot have worked together well. I also remember reading your story before but I don't mind reading it again. Keep up the good work. :)
    July 19th, 2011 at 09:07am
  • William T. Sherman

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    /sigh.

    I don't like Twilight, I read the books and saw the movies, but in all, it wasn't something that interested me. But, like I said, I said I would read and comment on your story, and I read small bits of it and looked over chapters.

    So I will comment on the actual writing of the story -- it moves really fast. Almost too fast. The pace is odd because the tone lacks enough emotion. I can tell you, if someone was following me? I would most likely take out my car keys and stab him -- or run, deluding myself that since I was a track star, I can out run anyone.

    Instead of showing us how characters are, you tell us. Your sentences are choppy and offer no variety, which gives a boring tone to the story. The tone she reflect the mood of the character, especially in first person -- I would be terrified, I would have a lot going through my mind if I was changed into a vampire. I would manage, but my words, actions and thoughts should reflect my utter confusion.

    And the other characters she interacts with? They need depth -- their reasons should be reflected through their actions, it'll give them more dimension and make the reader like them more. Don't take anything I said offensively, it's just what I saw in your story. It has potential for people who -like- Twilight. So, good job.

    Good luck, and happy writings.
    July 19th, 2011 at 01:10am
  • blakkarma22

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    I love her random bouts of singing. They remind me of myself. Keep writing.
    July 18th, 2011 at 06:34am
  • blakkarma22

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    I love her random bouts of singing. They remind me of myself. Keep writing.
    July 18th, 2011 at 06:34am
  • I'm Your Apocalypse

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    PLEASE OH PLEASE UPDATE!!!!!!!!
    July 17th, 2011 at 12:15pm
  • Error-00

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    Make the cookie peanut butter and we have a deal!
    Damn, I'm already commenting.
    Oh well,
    COOKIE!!! <---- cookie monster is awesome, like your chapter!
    July 17th, 2011 at 10:03am
  • NikkixNik_

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    This is nice(:
    &ooh! I almost forgot; the song is called Move Along, not Move On(:
    July 16th, 2011 at 06:52am