Man in the Mirror - Comments

  • Mr. Darcy

    Mr. Darcy (16090)

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    Throughout near enough the whole thing I wanted to know just who and why he was going after the 'Grace' person and thinking that she was hiding in other women's bodies.
    That was really intriguing about this.
    The layout and the banner complimented the story well, I think. And the title really matched the story - especially the last chapter the most!
    I was really drawn in to this because I just wanted to know what was going to happen next and such.
    Amazing read.
    September 5th, 2011 at 09:17pm
  • fun ghoul fez.

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    First off, I adored absolutely everything about your summary page. The format of the summary was wonderful and that banner picture was absolutely gorgeous. I love Norman Reedus. And I'm always in for some really fucked up, twisted stories so this was a double whammie! In the first chapter, I noticed a few small mistakes; mainly homophones, like suite instead of suit, I believe. Nonetheless, you were right; the first chapter really was fucked up. But I enjoyed Norman's character; you gave him some very good development and there was enough mystery around him to keep the reader interested.

    When the dialogue in chapter two started, I noticed something unusual. "I'm sorry, I don't smoke."She frowned. The lack of a space between the quotes and the next word bugged me a little bit. Your character development of Elizabeth was great as well, while we're talking about chapter two. I think that you did a good job at creating a very vulnerable woman who just wanted some affection... I have a bad feeling about this. xD

    It furriated him... I believe the word you were looking for was infuriated. I'm sorry I'm being so nit-picky, by the way. =/

    I really want to read the novel that this is based on now. Dean Koontz is quite a good author and I'd like to see how that novel inspired your work. Overall, I really thought that this was a very interesting piece, unlike anything I've read before. However, I'm not sure how I felt about the ending; it just seemed like Norman figured everything out too easily, if that makes sense. I also saw quite a few word errors that were occasionally distracting. Other than that, I thought this was very interesting and I think I'm going to go watch The Boondock Saints now. xD
    June 26th, 2011 at 11:24pm
  • Audrey Hepburn.

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    DUUUUUUDE. You were right; this was some fucked up shit.

    But damn good fucked up shit! I liked it!
    June 15th, 2011 at 09:38pm