Opposition - Comments

This is quite good. I like the metaphor of the forest and the path, especially how the path out of his depression was harder than his path into it. I also love the overall message of hope and the power of friendship. As for con-crit/proofreading goes, I only found specific errors in the first chapter:
As I walked on I got the feeling I was being followed. I paused and thought a moment, I smiled to myself and thought who would follow? Who would care? - There should be a comma after "As I walked on", I believe. Also, I think the "Who would follow? Who would care?" after thought should be in quotations.
I continued along the path until the trees cleared and I came up to the edge of a cliff.- There should be a comma after "cleared" and before "and".
"We followed your tears and your Anguish" They replied- I'm not quite sure why "Anguish" is capitalized, and I'm not sure "They" should be either. Other than that there isn't anything technically wrong with this statement, although I must say I found it awkward. I'm not sure how you could fix it, but it doesn't read well as dialogue goes for me; like I can't really hear a group of friends saying it, but, hey, that could just be me. It's your call there.
"I love you guys to." Was all I could say to them. - "I love you guys to" should be "I love you guys, too,"

Well, I enjoyed reading and commenting on this. Keep up the good work. :)

Thanks, I'll go fix that up :)

In the second chapter:
"Your alone." It slowly whispered "Your nothing. you are making a mistake/
It shoud be you're not your.

I don't think this story was really that bad.
A few spots, like above, had a few mistakes, but it seems okay.
It's different from most stories on here, so I kinda liked it.

/sorryforthelatecomment

I really liked this. It was easy to relate to and easy to understand the emotions going on with the main character. A few basic grammar mistakes, but overall, it was very well written. :)

I really like this idea for this story.
The writing could use a little work as you have said before, but overall this idea is great! :D
Keep up the good work.

Yea sorry. It was dark in the forest because of the trees. When he got into the clearing it was sunny out. Yea I kinda realized I missed that now. Thanks for pointing that out sorry.

I'll do this in order. First, the summary. I think it was very confusing and redundant. Mostly: he weighs all the options heavily and decides to make a decision. I believe it'd feel less confusing if you switched words around or omitted the 'decides' and used another word.

Story content. I believe it's too clustered. In other words, there are no separation on paragraphs. This isn't common in books, but it's absolutely necessary on web stories. In books, paragraphs are indented, but not in web stories. This normally causes a strain on the reader's eyes and makes it visually unappealing.

Punctuation, spelling & grammar. Your grammar and spelling is alright, but there are some simple mistakes. The most recurred one in the story as a whole was the absence of apostrophes on the contraction don't. Also, I couldn't help but notice all the punctuation errors. You missed, by far, a handful of periods, commas and, in some places, semi-colons. At the end of dialog, be sure to put either a comma or a period. This really depends on everyone's personal writing style.

story:

[..] Your friends ha [?] if you can call them that are no where to be seen they have abandoned you your life is forefit"

I believe you meant forfeit.

story:

[...] hold you tight when your feeling [...]

That should be a you're as in you are.

As for the story itself, I do understand the main idea, but I'm confused with certain parts. At first, he's going through a forest and it was dark. But then, he was wondering why it had gotten dark so suddenly. Just a little detail I noticed.

Hope that helped~

I was not planning on continueing the story. Although I could add another chapter (The return treck away from the cliff would be the only thing left I believe) If you are interested I would gladly write it up for anyone whos interested.

I actually really like this story. I like what you have with it. It has a lot of moving emotions that a lot of people around here can relate to. I would only say that you or a beta/editor should go through and check on the punctuation. There are a few places I noticed where there were periods where there should be commas or a lack of an apostrophe on some contractions. Also I would advise that you put an extra space/enter between the paragraphs. It makes things a little easier to read that way. Besides that, I have to say that I am very impressed. This is wonderfully written. Please tell me if you ever need any help with anything with this story whether it be editing (though I'm not the best at that) or making you a layout. And please really tell me if you plan to continue this story.

So just looking for criticism. I know its not that great and I kinda made it up on the spot without planning or anything. I'm sure if I planned it out more it would have been better. Just looking for opinions. :)