All I have to say is wow. This piece, written by your friend, it's utterly beautiful. The searing honesty, the feeling in it. I like that it's short, because it's just right.
The repetition in it, the whole "She's got a fear of [insert fear here]", it gives it a nice rhythm that flows throughout. The way she keeps true to what she's saying without overdoing it is also quite nice.
Some of my favorite lines are: While others hold faith in her, she longs not to disappoint them yet she claims to know that she will. However, I have faith in her still.
Superstition is not a problem; every mirror has been cracked, the problem is her self-esteem and the faith that she lacks.