June 25th, 2011 at 10:36am
This was lovely :)
It was very short and to the point and I liked that. It was literally just her state of mind; it was just a quick explanation. It was nicely written, too. It didn't seem like you were trying to hard, which some people come off as, it just flowed really great. ^__^
The only thing I could think of that could change was maybe a bit more background to it, ya know? You didn't give a whole lot of detail to it, which I guess adds a bit of mystery to it (for me it did, anyway) but I would have liked to have known the characters a bit more.
It was still great, though. Fantastic job. <3
Other than that, very small problem, it truly is lovely! Short and sweet and like Benihana said, to the point.
Excellent work darling
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