Yeah....so....my lip is bleeding from me biting it while reading this. It's better than anything I've ever read in any book porn, or anything else. Wow!
This is the best sex scene I have read on Mibba, or anywhere in all the hundreds of books I've read. This is THE BEST Sean fan-fiction in the whole world! You better win for this perfect one-shot. I felt myself in there, even if it was third person. You have the best way with words, its so beautiful. I'm so glad you didn't made Sean into some dumbass celeb. You made him into a real person, a real man.
If I have to say anything it's you got the dominance perfect in the story.
My favorite thing ever was this part, "Calli was the main photographer of Playgirl, which naughty, horny women seemed to purchase in a time of need." and "I am going to ravish you all night."
I was laughing most of the time, because sex scenes make me laugh.
You will go so far in this world. You are amazing, and I feel so lucky for you to edit stories for me. Also I linked this story in my new chapter. Please, PLEASE, never stop writing. :))))))
Oh my freaking lord, that picture. Where on Earth do you find these wonderful things? The layout was wonderful, as always; I love the difference in font sizes, it just looks so great. When I opened the chapter itself, I must admit that I wasn't a huge fan of the blue background behind the chapter title but that's a trivial thing. xD
Once again, the idea for this was certainly new. I only wish that he posed for Playgirl... or, you know, that I bought it. xD In addition, I love how you take the time to set the situation up and give the characters background information and actual personalities. It definitely makes the story more than a PWP. I must admit, however, that I'm not a fan of linking pictures in the story itself; I prefer to have them described.
"I guess your the photographer for the day?" That should also be you're. (:
I am going to ravish you all night." Oh holy hell, that was glorious. That was hot. 'Nuff said. That was another very well-written sex scene and you definitely incorporated the dominance theme. Once again, I thoroughly enjoyed this oneshot and I wish you luck in the contest. (:
This should totally win the contest! It's awsome. The words you use make the story flow and exciting! Also the characters, I could picture perfectly in my mind! x