How my end came to be. - Comments

i feel like you embodied the final moments of a suicidal person's life. i mean, not everyone second guesses themselves, but a lot do. and the fact that you pointed out he was trying to fight against the voice, to try and find reason was… i don't know, i can't think of a word for it. i guess it was just real.

in regards to you relating to this character, i'm sorry that you're going through such a thing. i can say i completely understand what you're going through, and if you ever want to chat i'm here ^.^ i really appreciate it when writers put themselves into what they're writing.

all in all, nicely done!

This was...kind of creepy, like losing control. said. But I liked it. The imagery was really good; I could imagine pretty much everything that was happening as I was reading. :)

I liked this - well i wish it wasnt explaining how you feel but your good at writing, you remind me of a guy i know, keep holding on that voice will go away x

Changed the layout..hopefully this one is not as....terrible? :P

Well then. That was kind of creepy, not gonna lie, but I liked it, oddly enough.

The layout kind of hurt my eyes, but I've never been a fan of red on black or layouts that are aligned to the left, so that's probably a personal thing.

There were also a few grammar mistakes. Like in this sentence: "Let go, let them live there lives without something weighing them down.”
"there" should be "their. There was a couple others I saw but nothing too terrible.

Good job though, the imagery was good and you made me feel sorry for the poor boy.

Just a simple shor story, expressing my feelings in a way that I could not get with just a poem.