The layout is super distracting, oh my gosh, but the men are very nice to look at. hehehe. You should go back into the layout editor and play around with it, you might be able to get a good less distracting layout of it it. Overall, it's not too bad. Your dialogue was good, but you should go a bit more indepth with your characters.
June 6th, 2012 at 06:13am