To The Side In The End - Comments

I have to disagree with missdanielle when she said this should be a complete story.
Why? Because it is perfect just the way it is.
You gave us just enough to draw us in, then cut it off abruptly, that's it, the end. Just as their relationship was. The way it mimicks your words is just incredible.
I love The Maine <3 and I love this short story. You wrote it beautifully.

This is so, so lovely. <3
I also loved the fact that you had it done the same night I gave you the song. xD

Anyway, this is one of my favorites. I don't know what it was but my heart was kind of breaking for him. I know the feeling of being toyed around with and then shot down like nothing happened and you portrayed that emotion very, very well. It really hit home with me. Almost made me a bit teary eyed :') Your idea was spot on, and it fit very well with the song. Especially not hearing the song before hand, that's kind of impressive. :)

As far as flow and such, it was very, very nice. It all flowed together nicely. Your ideas didn't get all mixed up and confused, which I know can happen, but you stayed spot on with the issue at hand. I love the fact that you talked about all the things they did (the movies, getting drunk and doing stupid things like that) without really focusing in on any specific one. It definitely worked out great on your part. :)

So, thanks again for entering this lovely piece of work! I loved it to pieces<3

I think you could make a total story out of this!! Involve him being tormented, trying to move on, seeing Katherine on the streets, etc.! You're also a FAN-FREAKING-TASTIC writer! (I'm crazy about grammar, and you made me want to keep reading and wanting more!) Definitely subscribing to you as a user (if that's even possible? I dunno, but I'll figure it out! haha. Don't stop writing!