Potato Soup - Comments

Wow, this is amazing.
I can't wait to read more from you and I hope to read more also.
Really good at description.

Your writing is very witty, and I absolutely love it! I love the detail, and how everything was laid out clearly. You practically put my senses into overload. I enjoy how you didn't shove any information down our throats. There was no telling but only showing. It's a difficult thing to do and you nailed it. Are you seriously only 14? You have talent. I can't wait to read more stories from you. ^^

This was really fucking good. I expected it to be just okay, a scene dragged out with no purpose, but that was definitely not the case. I applaud this. Every time I eat potato soup, I will forever think of this story.

YES AMEN PLEASE! Explain to we why the tab button does not work on Mibba!!! How do I space my paragraphs? That is the information I truly seek. Thank you.

You certainly do not suck at description! This was so vivid and life-like. I could see, hear, feel, and smell everything. I could smell that weird smell of potatoes the entire time. I do agree with the user above me and I do regret underestimating you. This was simply wonderful and fantastic! I don't really like that point of view, but you certainly made it work and wowed me! Unlike Luna though, I guessed that it was a mother and son. Regardless, I love the mystery about it and it makes Iit that more relatable for the reader because it's not set in stone! You've done a great - no, perfect job. The only thing I suggest is you space your paragraphs better. :)

Oh my friggin' goddess, dude. >.< I had no idea it was going to be this good. Potato Soup? I mean, really. Your username (that being the show that I don't particularly like) kind of sent me off into this assumption that your writing might be only a bit better than the show itself. And I was so wrong, and I regret it hard --hard-- (hard -snicker-) that I ever made such a bold assumption.

Your writing was so...descriptive. You're bad at description? Are you serious? I see that this is completely not the case. Your description is amazing. It's captivating, not all that elaborate, but it has meaning within it, it has deep emotion, and it serves as such a purpose to your talent. You have talent, dude. c: No wonder you won the award. This story was so sweet; just the idea of the two of them, peeling potatoes together, just that. Just the image of it, which you provided so perfectly inside of my twisted mind, the two of them, this young little person, and her father, I assume. It's so sweet. <3

I also love how you drop little hints of the gender, and their relationship together --the narrator and the other character, of course-- yet you still don't say the words. To me, it seems that it's a girl and her father. I can only make that guess off of what you wrote, which was amazing.

Keep writing. :3 If you want me to read anything, I'm here to read and comment and give you my honest opinion. <3 I already love you, LOL.

-Luna

p.s., I have horrible allergies too.