great job it was written very well keep it up!
February 14th, 2012 at 03:13am
Hey! Ok, first off it was great. I really liked it, it was a great ending. I enjoyed how you understood who the characters were as more than a character. You knew how to portray each of them.
I do have one small critique. Try not to use the word 'fuck' so much. Or at least I don't think it should be used to often. There are other replacements such as 'damn it' or 'shit'. I find it makes it so much more realistic, or better written when the dialogue doesn't have too many profanities. It's just a pet peeve of mine. Other than that, it probably would have won first place anyway!
Congrats!