Senseless, Really - Comments

Wow. o: This was just...awesome. Powerful, illuminating, it shown light on so many little thoughts and conspiracies against any suicide decision a reader might be thinking about before they read this. It brings new to light to a new perspective, making you look back and think, you think hard, and realize that this story was the voice of reason you needed.

That was really awesome, dude. :3 Your words were powerful, they were meaningful, with deep emotion that would rattle someone awake. Perhaps not as elaborate one would want it to be, but it's still so good. Because it was absolutely right, and I just loved that. <3 Truly, I loved it. Great job.

-Luna

I really liked this. The lead into the story was perfect, with the way you didn't specify exactly what was going on. Then, toward the middle, you clarified a bit more, and it really was just awesome, because the reader finally realizes what is going on, and then they feel a bit of surprise and suspense, waiting to see what happens. The ending is sad, but it's perfect. I loved it. I enjoyed reading it so much. <3 I can't even think of anything more to say. x)

Wow...

Just....wow...

I need to get over my shock before I can properly comment on this. I am absolutely in love with this piece! It's brilliant! There is so much emotion in all of it! I love the idea of having two alternate versions of one person, the one talking to the other in those last crucial moments. From the first sentence you absolutely captivated me and then it continued on to be that much more than I could ever have imagined! This is simply riveting!

Aw, I loved it.
It's got a quiet sort of emotion to it that I can't quite beg, not really sadness even with the idea of suicide before her. At first I thought it was like a friend talking Patty from behind her while she stood on or before the train tracks, but it ended up being her future self. I think that edge gave the story a bit more scope.
I especially loved the part, You could have fallen in love with him.
The idea of living for love has always been sweet for me. The descriptions of being a writer and living in a shit apartment above a comic book store and the punk music, it gave Patty a bit of good background which I thought was good as well.
Overall it was a wonderful piece about a very zoomed in moment of someone's low. Great work.

The background is simple. I love the banner. It struck my interest straight away, exactly with the heading. I love your writing style. It was brillent. The words you portrayed were powerful and strong. I found it beautiful. :)

I loved the picture at first and I loved it even more when I finished reading. Because now it means so much more. Like she has her bags packed like she's going somewhere, and in the reality of the story that somewhere is death. I thought it was brilliant. I loved the way it was written. I love how it's the same person sorta talking about herself. It's kind of amazing I mean is reality in a way, the people that think about commiting suicide, some of them don't consider the life they could've had. Which is why I love this. I didn't expect to like it so much actually but I do. Also my mind kind of wonders a lot and the way it ended and because of "the voice" of the story I imagined that the girl isn't fully dead that maybe she's in a hospital dying and all of that was her having an inner argument with herself. I don't know it probably wasn't your intention but that's what so great about it that there's actually two endings you can imagine for it.

This is really, truly beautiful. I love how it sticks to this one point, but so many other perspectives. Brilliant.