Behind Plastered Smiles - Comments

I love this story :) and I like the layout very original. :)

I love this story :) and I like the layout very original. :)

I reeeeaaally loved this story <3
I prefer happy endings but the ending of your story feels perfect and happy in its own way. I mean, Sienna is gonna get her life back.

Good

* The layout (the 'creeper shutterbugs' in the back)
* The banner -- very cute and relevant
* Paragraphing and little star separators
* Grammar, Sentences and Structure were all nearly perfect. A couple of human errors but every human has errors =]
* Nice sense of vocabulary, I like the use of crestfallen
* The actions were smooth, not a single action missed out, no jumpy bits.
* I really liked the character of Addie
* The picture!! Musta made Logan feel absolutely horrible but it portrayed everything in the story. Her life was all about Logan, no space for herself.
* Very realistic, she didn't suddenly stop loving him.
* The letter at the end

Bad

* Little edits to the plot would have made it a little better
* It doesn't quite grab your interest straight away, not until the crestfallen bit really but nothing big.
* Don't you think Sienna would have said something first before just randomly leaving? ... But, then again, I probably woulda done the same thing but a little earlier =/

Anyway, I loved this story and like mynameislela17, I think a little back story like how they met might be nice. Also, I'm judging this awards contest and this one-shot and (if you wish) some others might be a nice addition to the event XD (if your interested it's the link at the bottom of my sign)

I really love this! Such a great one-shot!
And I'm wondering if you would make a story of this one-shot? I'm sure that it will be a very good story :)
Okay, that's my ramble. Anyway, I love it!! :D

This was absolutely heartbreakingly beautiful. Just incredible.