Praise: Your descriptions are really good, it was really easy to imagine what was going on. Also, from the way you wrote it, Kendall seemed really sweet, and i could tell that her really cared about Peyton. Also, the things I mentioned in the contest thread that would earn bonus points, you got all of them. :D
Critique: There were a few spelling mistakes, nothing too bad, though. Also, I'm going to be honest here, Peyton kind of pissed me off. I mean, I can understand why she was so upset, but there was no need for her to be so rude about it. Of course, one of the bonus points was for if you made me feel something, so that could also be counted as a good thing. :)
Praise:
Your descriptions are really good, it was really easy to imagine what was going on. Also, from the way you wrote it, Kendall seemed really sweet, and i could tell that her really cared about Peyton. Also, the things I mentioned in the contest thread that would earn bonus points, you got all of them. :D
Critique:
There were a few spelling mistakes, nothing too bad, though. Also, I'm going to be honest here, Peyton kind of pissed me off. I mean, I can understand why she was so upset, but there was no need for her to be so rude about it. Of course, one of the bonus points was for if you made me feel something, so that could also be counted as a good thing. :)