Hopeless - Comments

First, lemme just… Yeah. The layout? It’s absolutely perfectly fantastical. I adore it. That picture is just so… It’s gorgeous. Anyway, on to the story. Your writing was just as absolutely beautiful as your layout. I love how you used so few words, but managed to fling so much across to me. I can see drugs somewhere in this mix obviously, but I just adored how he wanted so badly to have a galaxy right above him where he could reach for a star. I loved it even more when you went on to say that he couldn’t even reach the ceiling, let alone a star. The last line tied everything up beautifully, and just made it all that much better. It’s not possible to make this better. I love it.
<3 Haven

This is a beautiful piece, and you managed to tell so much in so little words.
I especially loved the way you described the ceiling as 'cottage cheese' I found it to be a great way of doing so, and something very different.
I thought you made the starts sound very real, describing the way they burnt the palm.
Overall, a wonderful piece, and a joy to read.

First comment!
The
layout is beautiful
the story is intresting