Jasper - Comments

Quiet not quite in the scene with Carly in the car with Kelly and Nathan. :) Whether instead of weather in the scene at the mall. Heart not hear when she saw the message on the mirror written with her lipstick. Buy not by when the mother left for groceries. Channing not Canning Tatum. Least not lease in the scene after Carly blacks out. and again when Jasper shows her that same scene next chapter. Least not lease again after Ian catches the two lovebirds kissing. There is a url in the scene where Jasper disappears to let Carly change. You might have heard in the scene where they are going throught the maze to enter the woods. What and not want in the scene where they are outside the cabin. too not to in the scene where amelia confesses her plan. Relief not relive in the scene where Jasper shows up behind Cassandra.

No one suspected that Bertha ever committed these murders or beatings. They were instructed not to say a thing. Other than their husband was drunk. Or they were attacked by a stamped. Never the less, some people suspected it was her. Some people did.

I am sorry but this lost me a bit.
Alright now i am sorry I nitpicked so much but I find you too good of a writer to have such minor mistakes. I would like you to go over the can'ts in your story most of them don't have apostrophes.

Beyond that let me say that you are amazing and I think this is a really good story. I like what you are doing with the past here and I am impressed by how the story comes to life. The fact that I only had minor mistakes to point out makes me very happy and instills confidence in your talent. I would definitely like to continue reading this. You are a very good writer with a very good plot on your hands. Thank you for sharing this :)

Wow, I cannot even... Wow. Please update soon :)

Very cutely written. I love ghost stories. Keep at it :)

Sweet chapter! I like Jasper :)
I'm thinking Jasper is, and the girl....
Can't wait to find out!!!

Definetely Keep, I Wanna See Whos Haunting :)