Feel the Momentum - Comments

  • gurue

    gurue (100)

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    Aw I think this story deserves more comments. I really like the direction this is going in. That whole medieval atmosphere is something I'm fond of, it's easy for me to imagine the village, the peasants, the knights and whatnot. Toushi seems like quite the character, mostly a quick thinker, but I'm still wondering why he appeared in the forest with no memory. Ah, always a mystery that keeps a reader wondering, haha. As for Pan, I'm not quite sure whether to like him or not, he gives off that sort of arrogant vibe.

    As for the story line, where the Princess has been captured and needs to be saves is cliche, however, from what I've read so far, I think there's plenty of room for twists and turns to make it more intriguing. Cliches aren't always bad, I quite enjoy some of them.

    Anyways, I like what you have here so far, and I'd love to read more whenever you update. Good luck with the rest :')
    August 3rd, 2011 at 08:59pm