First off I have to say the layout and banner is brilliant. The banner gets across that dreamy feeling of someone taking you away, making you "their's". And I liked it very much.
The chapter itself was great as well. I like scenes and such that have an emotional shift. You did that very well, moving from star crossed lovers to a parasitic relationship that you want the heroine to get out off. You work's brilliant.
D: Wah. She seems so cute and nice and small and fragile. It's totally not fair that this happened. I like how you really impress the contrast between them, how he's very masculine and commanding and just an overbearing individual in general and she's a lot more soft about everything. Too, how he sort of blends in like everyone else. I think that's really important, because it goes to show how while someone may be vile on the inside, they can seem like the most perfectly normal person ever.
I think that it has a lot of potential for a first chapter, and it definitely establishes their relationship to come. It's still sad, though!
So far this is wonderful. You are really good with description. I love how everything is explained from the start, it'll make it a lot less confusing later on. I have a few questions, but I'll have to wait for the story to continue because I'm sure they'll be answered then. I like they layout. The darker background fits the story plot and the picture is very interesting.