I love how simple, yet elegant the layout is. I am curious to know the word count. If you could shoot that to me in a message, that'd be great. It won't go against you. It's just nice to know.
It feels like there should be more detail on the characters. Okay, Lola's hair is blue and blonde and Avery's hair is black. What else about them? However, you are extremely talented at capturing the body language of the characters.
No music and no dancing? I would quite honestly die. Great job on continuing to escalate your story.
Hehe... I absolutely loved it. Great job. The only things I see that you can work on is the detail. Wonderful.
It feels like there should be more detail on the characters. Okay, Lola's hair is blue and blonde and Avery's hair is black. What else about them? However, you are extremely talented at capturing the body language of the characters.
No music and no dancing? I would quite honestly die. Great job on continuing to escalate your story.
Hehe... I absolutely loved it. Great job. The only things I see that you can work on is the detail. Wonderful.