August 19th, 2012 at 08:29pm
wow
alright okay that was me pausing in awe because of how great this was. darker than i expected which is a good thing because dark = amazing usually, i liked the repeated "kersplat" near the end and the progression of how much control pip really had over yuri, it started off with one death and then another and then another, and mostly i found it interesting when pip left as well. its amazing how cruel the world is. yuri didn’t touch laura. he didn’t push her off the bridge. laura jumped off on her own. yuri didn’t pull the trigger he loaded the gun as pip handed it to him. laura wasn’t pretty that day. she was ugly and pip was happy. that was one of my favourite bits as well as the ending, the line breaks were perfect and how the point of view changed (if that's the right word) because it's the first time we get a direct "i" rather than "yuri" etc. what a great writer i wish i had half the talent you do
Wow! That story was really good, very dark. Although a few things, you have some spelling errors and grammar ones that make it hard to read. I like the imagery with pip. It was really interesting. Great story!