If We Ever Meet Again - Comments

I like it a lot! I'm not big on fan-fics but this one was good, I do like Avenged Sevenfold and Zacky ;) haha and I like the way you wrote it, very nice. It doesn't suck and I subbed in case you didn't know haha

Well I have to say I'm not a big fan of fan-fiction. I'm so out of the loop when it comes to bands. I noticed a lot of tense mistakes in the prolouge. It should be past, when using 3rd person POV. There are a few plot holes, but I think if you work on it, it'll be great.

The first chapter really shocked me. I wasn’t expecting it at all. You’re incredibly descriptive, and your story reads easily.

I’ve never been a fan of P.O.V. changes, but I guess it’s kind of needed for this type of story. This story is wonderfully creative. I really enjoyed reading! I like the twists and I’m looking forward to more!!

First, I love the summary and the prologue. They tell you so much and it's nice to know a bit of background before you jump right into a story. Also, the layout is nice. Not too bright, but not plain either.

Second, I think you are a very good writer. You seem very good with description and I like that you get a point of view for more than one character.

Third, I love this story. The characters seem realistic which is unusual for a band fiction. I like the idea of the story and so far where it seems to be going. The best part is that it's not moving to fast.
I'm really enjoying this story.

So I'm gonna end the comment and continue to read. Oh, and I'll be subscribing for sure. (:

I like this story even though I dislike most fan fics. I guess mostly because the guys seem like normal human beings and not some sort of ROCKSTAR GODS like most fan fics tend to do.

I like Skyler's character cause she seems like a simple type of person. and I'd switch jobs with her any day! hahaha :B besides that,

it's easy to read. Maybe a little more description on things would be good but overall, a good read :)

I love the idea of this. :) It's unique and definitely original. That's when you know you've got a good story on your hands. I also love that you alternate between perspectives and you don't just stick to one. That's always been something I had trouble with but you seem to pull it off effortlessly. I love the relationship between Skye and her new-found friends and I think I may have likes Skye and Zacky together a bit more than her and Jimmy. Oh well. I also think the only thing this lacks is the relationship between Skye and Matt. I haven't seen much of that but I'm sure you have wonderful plans for this. There were a couple of grammatical errors but nothing too major. I'll definitely be coming back to see where you take this. (:

Whoops. Didn't mean to post that twice...

This is really good. ^-^ I don't even usually read band fanfics, but this is well-written, the characters are believable, and you have a very good style of writing.

This is really good. ^-^ I don't even usually read band fanfics, but this is well-written, the characters are believable, and you have a very good style of writing.

I like your idea. I also love the title. It’s very original and very interesting. Along with the layout and Banner, I really adore the Banner. It’s very nice and the layout is simple but blends well. I especially love that this is an A7X story. :)

Prologue: Wow... That’s was shocking, though I already knew what was about to happen from the summary I felt shocked. How everything just quickly stepped up after he put the kids to sleep then the mother stabbing him with a needle and setting the house on fire. :o One word... Awesome.

Chapter 1: Just watch out of those conjunction words. A lot of times you use ‘and’ more than once in a sentence. Only a few typo’s and grammar mistakes but easily fixable. I really love Matt’s side. I love how the guys come in and are like, ‘We don’t mind!’

Chapter 2: I literally fell in love with this chapter! xD Everything was going pretty quick, which I like. I adored the ending. Making readers want more.

Chapter 3: Gosh... you are amazing. I couldn’t help but smile the whole way through this chapter. I love the both of them together.

Chapter 4: Oh god. I love Johnny. ’You’re HOT!’I couldn’t help but laugh my head off. Your descriptions are fantastic!

Chapter 5: Brian’s so nice. :) Though I have a feeling that I would have loved it to go the other way around. This may be late but I love how you don’t just put it from one persons point of you but all of them.

Chapter 6: I love Skye in this chapter and Jimmy. Gosh... your cliff hanger is.... grrrr! I’m so subscribing to this! This is amazingly brilliant. And I can't wait to see what happens next! :D

I actually like it. :) The story line/plot is good and so is the dialogue, it's just the spacing of it. Everything's pretty meshed together, which doesn't separate things and makes it a little harder on the readers to read.

I also agree with Odette; instead of putting time period in between days or years, you can introduce it and use it as a chapter or paragraph starter.

I would split the first paragraph of the prologue because it's too long and should be two separate paragraphs.

The detail is quite intriguing and what caught my attention was the last paragraph. It makes me want to read on.

Instead of saying: *The Next Day* you should say:

The next day a reporter...

And so on and so forth.

Good job so far though :D this story has potential!

Layout:

I definitely think you should make a custom layout. I bet you can make the perfect one that will really fit this story(: You can always ask someone to make you a layout. Also, a banner would be perfect since it's a romance between twins. I think that would be awesome! :D

Summary/Title:

The summary was short and sweet, giving just enough information to intrigue you(: The disclaimer is always important, so i'm glad you included that. The title fits exactly with the story :D It's an intriguing title, and I really like it so far.

Story Content:

So far, I've seen few grammar and spelling mistakes. That's a good sign! :D I personally don't like to read or write in the present tense--I like the past tense. But, if it works for you, that's what matters. You have a professional way of writing and your descriptions are flawless. I would consider spacing things out a little more, though, to make it easier to read.

Awesome job! <3

This sounds like an interesting concept. I cannot wait to see what you do with it. I am looking forward to more!

Thanks :)

I don't think it sucks at all
I'm actually looking forward to reading more
So update soon
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