One of Us - Comments

I had to admit, at certain points of this one-shot I was tempted to blurt out how mushy and perfect it was. Sometimes stuff like that just puts me over the top. However...I never reached that point! Every time Scott said or did something sweet, it was almost as if the story pulled away for just a second so that it wasn't so overwhelming. That made me much happier while reading because it didn't end up just being completely gooshy and mushy.

Again, as with your other story, your writing is basically error proof (at least without specifically looking for errors, which I didn't do). It was easy to read and enjoyable! This was certainly a light-hearted, sweet, and happy read :)

This was adorable.

I'm going to be blatantly honest: I'm not a huge fan of Scott. I don't know what it is about him, but I don't like him in the comics, the numerous TV shows, or the movies. But I like him when he's with Jean, because he's different with Jean than he is with other people. And I think you portrayed that perfectly, which I loved. I actually cringed when Jean started mentioning Logan. I was thinking, "No, don't mention him! Scott hates him!" But she did it anyway. I thought that you got both of their characters spot-on; honestly, it was beautiful. You did a great job with it. Plus, your grammar and writing style were great (which are, of course, bonuses to the story itself).

Too cute. Scott and Jean are absolutely adorbale! And Scott is just the bomb. :)