Glitch - Comments

This story gives me life :D The background is cute as well as the rest of the layout. Besides that, I love this story. Im used to seeing stories on boy bands, and I think it's cool you made up a band of your own and give life to each character. I like the interesting take on Kimi who's Japanese and her family. I like the way the story is told in a sarcastic sort of manner, but it's still nicely written. I love it! I think it'll be cool to read the journey of these girls trying to become a successful band. The story seems to be a breath of fresh air:) Honestly! I'm only on chapter 3, but I'm definitely going to keep going! Good job:)

This story gives me life :D The background is cute as well as the rest of the layout. Besides that, I love this story. Im used to seeing stories on boy bands, and I think it's cool you made up a band of your own and give life to each character. I like the interesting take on Kimi who's Japanese and her family. I like the way the story is told in a sarcastic sort of manner, but it's still nicely written. I love it! I think it'll be cool to read the journey of these girls trying to become a successful band. The story seems to be a breath of fresh air:) Honestly! I'm only on chapter 3, but I'm definitely going to keep going! Good job:)

From the comment swap.
You're writing is so full of personality and it makes it so fun to read. You also do an amazing job of bringing your characters to life; they're not typical and they seem like great characters. Your descriptions are great as well; you say just enough so its not overwhelming. Also, I didn't catch any grammatical mistakes so that's always a plus.
This is so great!

Wow, just to start off the layout is so cute. I loved how the summary was like it was speaking to me, does that make sense? Makes me feel more involved. The quote at the beginning of chapter one is so nice-the only word I can think of even though it's more than that. Already having a hopeful air about this story.

they wouldn't have had such a beautiful, wonderful daughter... And my brother too I guess. So cute. :P

Another girl, our impatient pianist Mickie growled as she coiled as strand of chocolate brown hair around her finger
Should be a I believe. Hope that isn't annoying, I know with my stories I prefer to be corrected even if it's small unnoticeable things.

I absolutely adore this story, it's so neat. :) It is really well written and the grammar is amazing. Keep up the amazing work!

Hey darling. I'm so sorry I haven't commented. :( I've been receiving notifications that you've been updating... and updating. I just, haven't had the time to read updates lately, because school has been hectic for me. :/
I figured I'd let you know just to give you clarification that I'm still here. I just... I have a lot to catch up on. So it may take me a little while to catch up with the updates, depending on how hectic things remain. I hope to read them this weekend, but, depending on how things go I may not be able to read them until next week, when I get off early for Thanksgiving break. :/ I'm so sorry. I really feel bad, too. :'(
I'm sure you're doing a great job with this. Even though I have yet to read all of the new updates, I'm sure you are. And I'm sorry if it takes me a while, like I said, to give you full feedback on all of them. But I promise that I will read them as soon as I have time. It's awesome that you've been updating so much, though. I wish I could update as much as you. lol. But it's showing that you're dedicated. :)
Well, I guess that's it. I just wanted to let you know why I haven't been commenting. I'm still here, I promise. Hopefully soon I'll be able to catch up with the updates.
'til then, hope you receive great feedback from others. <3

This is really good! Good grammar and everything.

I like the banner picture you have. It goes well with the story. I'm just not the biggest fan of the blue-ish green letters on a black backdrop. Now, the contents of the story are very wonderful. ^^ I find the narrator's persona very refreshing. She's not very modest, and that's something I believe most authors love to write with. Modest shy characters. I love how Kimi is. Really. ^^

And your writing style is nice. Simplistic and straightforward. It flows with no awkwardness and it keeps the reader. Very wonderful job, hon. <3

Hm... so you're rewriting this, I see.
Well, great job with the new first update! lol. I kind of liked this one a lot better... it's kind of getting right into things, without hesitation. But I wonder what it is that the band's missing, though? It must be something... inside, emotionally, because otherwise I'm sure if it was something more like, physically, Ethan would've told Kimi.
Music is all about emotion, so I'm thinking that's what it is. Something missing... emotionally.
Can't wait to see what you have in store now! I really hope that you continue on with this version. :)

First of all, this was fun to read! You bring so much energy to the story, I just had a blast reading it:)
I also love how you give each character their own flavor and personality. With so many characters, you could have been lazy and just glazed over their personalities, but you put the originality it your story by having creative and unique characters that the reader could relate to.
As far as I could see, there were no grammatical mistakes, so good job!
good luck with the rest of the story, I hope to see the next chapter up soon!

This is a pretty interesting story I have to admit(apologies if that sounds mean).there's potential for this to become a great story, a plot twist may be a good idea further in so it's not cliche. The layout suits really well and looks good. Over all well done, there is potential

Hey. As stated in the free reviews journal, I'm going to be blunt so if I offend you or anything, it was not my intentions.

Layout: The layout bored me a bit. The green didn't really work for me but the print was readable so that's all that matters.

Chapter One: Is Kimi Japanese? I don't mean to sound ignorant but her name can be spelled in Hiragana instead of the American names spelled in Katakana. You probably have no idea what I'm saying :l

To be honest, it does sound a bit cliche but it's still too soon to tell.

I noticed how you capitalized the first letter of a pronoun. Like..."Hello." She said." When its supposed to be "Hello." she said.". Just something to look out for (:

But seeing as how you have about 5-6 characters in the band only, it could get pretty confusing. I would've liked more details on their appearances and what makes them stand out than the other band members. Like do they have freckles, glasses, etc.

Chapter Two: Elena seems like an overused name, in my opinion. But not so much as Melissa or Stacy for a mother's name.

So I think I established that Kimi is Japanese and her mother is white. See, as the writer, you have to tell us to avoid questions such as these. I don't remember if you did or not but it would be nice if you did.

So her father is Japanese, her mother is white and her friends seem like a mixture between American or British :l Well in my opinion they do.

Next time, I suggest telling us to refrain from confusion. But overall, this story has tons of potential to unleash. Just maybe twist up the plot so it doesn't sound too cliche and use some more descriptions (:

Loved the update! Hm... so Kimi is going to have a few, or one, unwanted relative/s visiting. That should be interesting.
Great job with the second update! Can't wait for more! :D

I just finished reading the summary, and, might I say that this is spectacular! The way you make it seem like the narrator is speaking directly to me/the reader is something I don't see too often in stories. Plus, I really like the layout and the idea you have for this. =)Iamsogoingtoshootyouinthefootifyoudon'tupdatesoon UPDATE?! I'm off to go read chappie 1 <3

This is very interesting so far =D You have a nice writing concept, and you have the perfect amount of descriptions. Some authors rave on with their descriptions, but you have a nice amount that gives the reader a good idea of what you're talking about :D

The layout and banner fit wonderfully with the story. The colors of the background mixed with the colors of the banner were very good together and created a nice story layout(:

The plot was unique and very fun to read. I didn't notice too many grammar or spelling mistakes, either, so that's a plus aha.

Hm... this sounds like it's going to be an interesting story. You really have me with the plot alone. :)
I can't wait to see what the 'glitches' are for them as they make their way to living their dream.
Can't wait for the next update!
Definitely... subscribed! :D

This is really beautiful! I love the layout, the banner, and the character. You have a wonderful writing style. :3

1st comment! hehe =-) This sounds really interesting, please tell me whenn you start it so I can read it =-) I'll subscribe, also. I like the discription!