Liamnjase - Comments

Oh my gosh, oh my gosh, oh my gosh I love this! And I'm really sorry my comment isn't going to be amazingly detailed, because I've only read the first chapter, but I just wanted to let you know I'm in love with this story and I've subscribed and I'll try to leave another comment when I've read more and I've said 'and' too much. Overall, wow - I love your writing style and kudos to you for writing in third person! :D This is the end of my ramble!

Why does this not have like 300 pages of comments, it's cute. I love how Liam looks out for Jase.

I sort of didn't like the way that Liam just accepted the way Jase kissed him. I didn't think that he should have said anything. Maybe he should have just thought "that was a nice way of telling him to shut up" instead of saying it out loud. That's just my personal opinion though, I don't seem to think a lot of talking is necessary with short stories like these.

You be a genius. I love this story with all my heart and I wanna squeeze Jase. Lord have mercy he is adorable. :D Keep writing!

Oh my lord, I adore this. I can't even find a better word for it- love, idolize, worship all of it. This is one of my absolute favourite stories on Mibba, no competition. I just want to keep reading it and reading it and reading it.

Forever.

No but really, at first I didn't really get it, but then when you first mentioned how close they were and then put Liamnjase I was just like THAT WAS CLEVER AND TRICKY. I LIKE CLEVER AND TRICKY. At first I thought it was some latin word or something, to be honest. I don't know, I noticed people have done that before, but THIS IS WAY BETTER THAN LATIN. I don't even know why I'm freaking out over something that you probably only have like three seconds of thought, but I just like how it made your story sort of unique in that sense.

I like how you write it too- with your run on sentences, it really goes well with how they're teenagers if you sort of get what I'm trying to say? Like, they don't seem like the type of person that would use flowery words, it's very... just, raw and there and take it or leave it, and the run on sentences I actually like because it's like their thoughts. They just keep going and yeah. It's okay if you find this confusing, I'm really bad at expressing myself. <- example 1.

I think my favourite favourite thing about this, you can probably guess now, the characters. Gah! I'm the type of person that pays a lot of attention to characters, I think they're what make or break a story, and I hate flat ones, so this very much tickled my fancy. I think my favourite thing about it is how, in a lot of stories there's the "bad one" who is made out to want to hurt everyone because they're just a bad person, but that's so incredibly unrealistic. But these people they hurt people but it's not like they mean to, but they just do, and that's usually what happens, usually people don't go out of their way to ruin other people's lives.

Like Scarlett is horrible to Liam because she knows that her boyfriend has feelings for him, Liam is horrible to Scarlett because he feels like she's stealing the boy that he has feelings for, and Jase is horrible to both of them because he's so confused. I love how the characters, they're all flawed and horrible to each other but it just makes me fall in love with them more.

I can sort of see why Jase would be into both of them though, while they both don't like each other, they're both really similar from what I can tell. Well, they both let themselves get stepped over by Jase, and they both seem like the quieter type. While Scarlett I think is like triple Liam's quietness, and maybe it's too soon to tell, I could see why Jase would go for her considering his best friend is sort of the same.

I am so glad you didn't paint the girlfriend too as a horrible double-crossing whore or something like that- it's so overplayed in gay fiction where they make all the girls the bad guys.

I actually feel really bad for Scarlett. I mean, that's got to take a toll on anyone to know that your boyfriend is gay for his best friend, and while I totally am rooting for Liamnjase, no doubt about it, just the first chapter really pulled on my heart strings a bit. I mean, she's pretty much questioning her morals over it. And she really likes him too, it's not like she's using him.

THAT BEING SAID, I REALLY WAS LIAMNJASE TO GET IT ON. Oh come on, you knew it was coming- they're like f*cking cute as hell. Jase watches movies he doesn't even like and Liam plays video games he doesn't even like. I love how you added that in there because it shows how they're that close, they'll do things that they don't like just to make the other one happy. That is so cute. And how he loves the smell of him too, COME ON.

THEY'RE FREAKING ADORABLE. YOU CANNOT DENY IT. THOUGH I DON'T BELIEVE YOU WILL.

And this is probably really insignificant, but I like how Liam's taller but he's more of the doormat... or well, the submissive one, but that just sounds raunchy, aha. But usually the taller person is supposed to be more masculine or whatever- that's how society paints it anyways- and I like how you sort of broke that.

... I'M GOING TO STOP SPAMMING YOUR COMMENT PAGE WITH MY POINTLESS RAMBLES AND LEAVE IT OFF WITH: FUCKING LOVE THIS.
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as if you couldn't tell already.

The layout is really clean and crisp, like it's actually really fun to look at for a few seconds. Does that make me sound odd?

I really like it though, so yeah.

And I only read the first chapter and I thought it was excellent. I think you captured Scarlett's thoughts and emotions brilliantly. I will definitely subscribe and read more and comment more as well.
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I've got a lot to catch up on with this story! For one, I have to give you a decent comment on chapter three. So we'll start there. :')

Chapter Three:
I feel sad for Jase. His past seems a little less than happy and I feel bad that his father just sort of. . left. I like this look into his mind and I feel somehow closer to something that doesn't exist. You've mad all of your characters so realistic and so believable.

I can relate to Jase a lot. He gets reckless to get a rush, I'm assuming. With the rush, he forgets about his problems and feels okay just for a little while. I think that being with Scarlett depresses him, actually. I think he's fighting so hard against his attraction to Liam so he's staying with her so he can say he's not gay, that he's not attracted to Liam, and so on. Jase is so far in denial that it's not even funny. I hope within the story he grows out of that and he can learn to accept himself, who he is, who he'll be, who's in his life, who loves him most, and get over the past completely. I hope he'll not need these vices as a crutch and will learn to completely lean on Liam.

Chapter Four:
This chapter really opens up to the depth of their relationship. As best friends and more. I can feel the utter and absolute love that Liam has for Jase and the hope that he held. The way you described how he felt about Jase made my heart soar. It was just so damn sweet, adorable, and heart felt. You've portrayed their emotions perfectly and I can easily tell who each chapter is focusing on without having to be told. They've got different tones to them. I love it.

Chapter Five:
I feel so sad for Liam. I want to hug him, honestly. It makes me dislike Scarlett a little bit. I mean, he's Liam. HIM AND JASE ARE SUPPOSED TO BE TOGETHER FOREVER. But I'm glad that even though Jase was with Scarlett, Liamnjase didn't vanish or fade but instead became stronger and better. Again, your descriptions let me see into these characters hearts, minds, and souls perfectly. Sometimes it breaks my heart because the emotions are so sad, but I can't help but read more. This story is one of my favorites on Mibba and I squee with joy whenever I see that it has been updated!

Please tell me when you update! <3

Aw this is totally adorable! I don't usually read slash, but this is too cute to pass up :)
Poor Liam! (I love that name by the way) I love how he keeps having hope though
And definitely poor Scarlett :( I feel her pain

Okay so I have seen this story before and never bothered to read it. No I am sorry I didn't this story is going to be addicting just like Jase's scent.(BTW I love the name Jase :p)

I feel so horrible for Liam. The way you show how upset he is over his best friend liking a girl, it's weird. I can understand it and I'm not a boy, or gay. This story is just amazing.

This story is freakin' amazing. I absolutely love it. I love your style, I love your plot, and I love your characters. The layout is simple, clean, and good without being distracting. The title is perfectly fitting, and your short and sweet chapters are keeping me on edge. The first one from Scarlett's POV was probably my favorite.
Anyway, great job, and keep writing!

Awe, :D I absolutely love your stories. They are addicting, and I normally can't wait til you update. But I can, I know i will. :D please do update soon. :D

I am SO going to whore this story, and your other one out, daily. My God. This update was so sweet. I love the way Liam secretly held a little crush on Jase even before they either of them knew Scarlett or whatever. I never read slash but this is the exception because you are brilliant. I just spelled that wrong and had to correct it. Wow. Anyways. I love the stream of consciousness way you're writing with this, it's one of my favourite ways to write. <3

I usually don't read gay fics at all because I can never relate to them, but after reading your "The Other Girl" story I just had to know what else you've been writing. I love the way you're showing each character's life and not just Scarlett's like some authors would. We want to know just what's going on inside everyone's head here, why people are upset, and who is to blame. Right now I'm thinking it's Jase because he's cheating on this girl with his gay best friend and it's sad. I'm guessing he's using her as a cover up?

Anyways, update soon. :)

so just as i expected, this chapter was amazing. i felt like i was in Jase's head and I could really feel what Jace is feeling. I feel so bad for him though. this comment sucks so much because im using my Kindle so I promise to leave you a way better comment when I get home Friday!

This story is making me smile the whole time. I love it. :D
please do keep up the good work.
Update soon. :D
please?

This is really awesome so far - you've established the relationships well, and although Jace and Liam's romance is super cute, I can't help but to feel sorry for Scarlett. I mean, it's kinda douchey to me for Jace to do something like that to her, but at the same time, it makes me wonder why she hasn't confronted him about it. I don't know. But that drama just makes this that much better. x) I'm attached to all of the characters already and I reaaaaallllly want to know what's going on in Jace's head right now.

Chapter two really made me smile. You made the love between them - that Liam feels for Jase - so apparent and so pure. I can feel the emotion and my eyes get a little watery and my heart feels light because I know that feeling. And if I didn't, you would have made me feel it regardless. I really love how you're focusing on one character at a time. I've felt a mixture of emotions so far - sadness and a bit of remorse from Scarlett and then love, bliss, and a tinge of unhappiness from Liam. I can't wait for you to open Jace's emotions to me and put them on display. I'm really interested as to why Jase doesn't end things with Scarlett, it's not like he and Liam have to be openly gay together. They could hide it like they do now. I think it would save Scarlett any further anguish and heartbreak. But I'm sure there'sa reason for absolutely everything and with time will tell. I feel that Jace's chapter will hold a lot of information for me. I can't wait to read more and explore the minds of these three. Amazing update! Let me know when you add another chapter. :)

WHY, does this not have a thousand comments? For real. This story is absolutely wonderful already and we're only one chapter in! I don't know why, but something about this just drew me in and demanded my full, undivided attention. I feel so sorry for Scarlet already, though. I can tell she's really upset and hurt by the situation, which is only natural. I mean, I'd probably be more than upset as well if my boyfriend was cheating on me with his male best friend. I'd feel like I turned him gay. But anyway, I really love your writing style. It's short, sweet, and to the point. You won't waste time on trifling details like some authors do, you have a more action-y writing style, I believe. Or a more personal one, actually, would be a better way to describe it. I feel like I'm taking a walk through your characters minds as I read what you've written. I love it. I can already tell that this is going to be my new favorite on here. I've been looking for a good slash and I believe I've found an absolutely wonderful one! Please, let me know when you update and let that update be SOON! <3

ahhahaha I'm the first one to comment... most of the time I am. :D

anyways...... I liked it. its cute. at the end, I said awe without knowing it. I think this will turn out to be an excellent story. Keep on writing. :D

and P.S... I need some help. :D