Incompatible - Comments

I really like this story! It's mysterious, which is kind of rare with romances nowadays so please keep writing! (:

Hi Daisy! Thanks so much for even reading it! You bring up very good points, and I thank you again for that! This is my first story I've written in this point of view. Before I had always written in the first person. There are just the two people. I know I did kind of jump a lot with him, but I suppose I was just trying to keep him more mysterious. I can tell you, however, that a lot is being explained with both of them in the first few chapters, and that will hopefully make up for the not so great intro. I hope you keep reading, but I understand if you dont. Thanks again for the review!

Hello! I am Daisy and I will be reviewing your story; now, take nothing I say offensively, because it is to help you and is mixed with my opinion. Thank you. C:

I will state this here and now: I do not like prologues. Prologues are always different, always an issue because sometimes they don't show an author's writing style, because a prologue, an introduction, can be anything, it doesn't even have to directly do anything with a story and can be misleading and sometimes very unappealing when getting into a story.

Now, this being an introduction/prologue, you're telling us a lot, but not a lot at the same time. This seems like it is going to be a romance, so it's interesting to see how things will turn out and why they will turn out that way, but we have to wait for that.

She is obviously a dancer and he's a mysterious guy, and this story can be taken in different ways and a lot of different things can be expected -- so, I would have to keep up with the story, but I don't know if I want to, since the introduction doesn't give us much of a taste to see what we'll be reading about or following along with.

Though, I didn't get it, were there three different people or just two, and if there were just two, how did he get on the plane? But I am thinking there were three? It's not very clear, which is sort of disheartening, but I am sure you'll make this out to be a very good story with a personal twist in it. C:

Good luck and happy writings!