As soon as I started reading this I was intrigued. I have such a weakness for hip bones on men and porcelain white skin. I think the repetition of the word "bone(s)" is a great way to exemplify emphasis and illustrate the portrait you're trying to paint. In the second chapter I became very fascinated with the direction that you took this story. Your diction is flawless and has no trouble conjuring up imagery. I think you are very talented and this is definitely something I will be reading throughout my spare time. xx
October 10th, 2014 at 09:59pm