She Walks In Beauty - Comments

AWE. I'm sorry it took me so long to get to it, so sweet! ^^

I loved it, really :) short and so sweet ^^

I can't wait to get to your other pieces!

I'm going to start by discussing your layout, which is absolutely stunning in every respect. Your banner is beautiful, and I feel that it compliments the story very well.
In terms of the actual story, I absolutely adored it. You write very well and the way that you captured Percy's unrequited love for Hermione made it seem almost canon. I enjoyed the metaphor of the "final nail in the coffin" and, similarly, the contrast between the happiness of a wedding and the sadness of a funeral. The ending that you have for this story really got me. It was beautiful.
Overall, excellent, excellent job. You're incredibly talented, and I absolutely adored reading this. :)

First ofall, I loved the banner and the summary. Your layout is really simple. <3 But it is really sad that Percy never got with Hermione.The way you talked about what could've been with them is really sweet and it gives me that warm and fuzzy feeling so to speak. I'm glad I read this. This is going under my favorites. <3

I really liked this <3 I had never thought of Hermione and Percy in a romantic way before but I enjoyed your take on it. :) She is definitely meant for Ron though.
I loved the 'I love you' line where Percy is talking to Hermione but makes it out like he is talking to Audrey.

I can't lie, this story made me giggle a little bit.
But, on a serious note, I think it was extremely well written. I love the way you described everything; it's really great. (:

I've never really read a Harry Potter fanfic but the summary of this caught my eye when I was looking through the stories page. That last line of the summary, Percy Weasley does not approve, made me laugh a bit actually; I can just see uppity Percy being a complete spoilsport at Ron and Hermoine's wedding. Before I read the story itself, I'd also like to add that your layout is quite lovely. :)

to buy her the gorgeous shoes she had spotted in shop window on her way to work... I feel like there should be an a between in and shop.

As soon as I read the part with the wedding invitation, I realized that this was going to be a humorous story at all. The comparison to the invitation being the nail in Percy's coffin was really great; it made it that much more effective and more painful to read. I also love how you included the actual text of the wedding invitation itself; if you had just left that out, it wouldn't have seemed as believable, but being able to see that text that Percy reacted to made my reaction stronger, if that makes sense.

Your description of Hermione rising up out of the ashes was brilliant; I could picture her as Percy was seeing her, all covered in dirt and grime but still absolutely beautiful.

involving a tampered with music box filled with acid landed Percy in a bed at Saint Mungo's, being treated by a beautiful woman, named Audrey. I feel like this sentence was quite similar to the one before that; mainly the named Audrey part. It just sounded slightly repetitive, if that makes sense.

Overall, I think that you did a great job with this piece. The raw emotion in it nearly broke my heart; I could absolutely feel Percy's longing for Hermione. I know I mentioned earlier that I don't read Harry Potter fic often but I've seen a lot of it and this seems like a rather unique concept, but it's completely believable; you made Percy into more than just a twit. If I ever decide to reread the books, I think that I'll look on him more favourably, because you made him into a true character. This was wonderful. :)

Really great short story :) Sorry Percy, but Hermione is meant for Ron :)

I loved this, especially:
*the analogy of how Hermione hurts Percy in relation to a final burial.
*how Percy says I love you at the end, but doesn't say Audrey's name = definitely got me. :)

You are definitely very talented.
You are now definitely one of my favorite writers.
I just feel overwhelmed to do a journal post about you now! GAH! :D