My Name is Molly Brooks and this is the Insane Story of How I Fell in Love - Comments

This seems like it could be a good story, but you need to work on the indenting and trying not to give too much away. Plus your entire first chapter could have been like 3 different chapters. Leave some surprise so we're not knowing this is just going to be another love story without some real tale behind it. Otherwise, good job.

Hi there(:

Okay, I would like to start off by saying that I really like the layout, whether or not it was custom-made. It's very nice, even though it has splatters on it x)

What I dislike most about this so far is the fact that you pretty much gave everything away in the summary and in the first paragraph of the first chapter. You pretty much just said what was going to happen, so it gives nothing interesting to read in further chapters because, well, there's nothing to look forward to. Slowly and slowly, they're going to fall in love, and voila. Happy ending. That doesn't leave anyone with any excitement to read further.