A Toast to Reckless Abandon - Comments

  • capheus

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    Wow, this was awesome. I kind of just stumbled upon it and it was really great so far. Haha, I love the name Callie because I was watching The Fosters while reading this and the girl's name is Callie but that's besides the point.

    This story has a lot of potential. It's got such amazing description and the wording you use, I love it. This has to be my favorite line: Sometime between one day and the rest of my life. i'm not even really sure why, it's just such a poetic kind of wording. You did amazing so far and i'm totally looking forward to reading more. c:
    July 10th, 2013 at 12:30am
  • alison.wonderland

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    Hyuiewk6sdmfhue. I am reading a bit of your stuff to get a feel for how you write cos we'll be writing together ( :D ) and this is SO GOOD. I seriously love it. Write more please. Subscribing.
    July 16th, 2012 at 04:18pm
  • bitter taste

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    I already know this is going to be amazing. The prologue is just perfect. You have such a beautiful way of describing things.
    Especially this line: She was the skeleton in your closet that dragged you back inside with her long, boney fingers gripped around your fleshy neck.

    I'm very excited to see all the things Callie does to the main character and to learn more about her. <3
    July 6th, 2012 at 12:23am
  • vices

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    OHP I'M READY FOR AMAZING
    just saying.
    please update soon. c:
    June 28th, 2012 at 10:53pm
  • Skylight Madness

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    I really like how you started it off. Miles sounds so freaking pissed off in the first chapter, like he's hatin' hardcore on this Callie girl. It's like, "this bitch right here. She ruined my motherfuckin' life yo!" I love it haha. I don't know why but I really do love it.

    I fucking love this kid. Oh my God he's so stupid and immature but I love it. Like he's the right amount to where he wouldn't piss me off every ten minutes. I would trade my unborn child for mint chocolate chip ice cream. I love it. Oh my god I laughed so hard at this line. Just...too much lol.

    That bitch. You can't just knock ice cream out of someone's hand and expect everything to be warm and fuzzy. If I were Miles, I would make her work to gain his love. ICE CREAM EVERYDAY MILES! Yeah, I'm subscribing to this because I'm in love with your childish character who loves ice cream more than his unborn child lol.
    February 14th, 2012 at 10:41pm
  • eight letters late.

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    For some reason, I thought the girl at the ice cream stand place thing was going to be Callie, BUT NO. I like how you did the whole thing with strangers and with the girl and with the yeah. Okay. KEWL. I like the characters so far except for Callie because I know nothing about her but yeah, write more of this shit. Wait, it's not shit. It's like rainbow glitter shit that smells like roses. Something is wrong with me tonight, buT JUST UPDATE OK.
    February 8th, 2012 at 07:24am
  • a n g e l.

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    I absolutely love this. You have an amazing way of writing.
    The layout: It was great. I`m sorry that I can`t really comment on the banner, I`m using a DSi which doesn`t really load big images...
    The title: It`s funny, cute, all of those good words c:
    The story: It`s great. I love your style and voice. I didn`t see any spelling or grammar errors.

    Sorry that this comment is so short, but I honestly didn`t see anything wrong with this.
    February 6th, 2012 at 01:06am
  • Little Robyn;

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    hi :D

    "If you asked me where I thought I was, I'd tell you somewhere in between trying to figure my shit out."- Perhaps if you say 'in between blank' you should have second thing to compare to? It would make more sense for the story.

    "Except not in a pussy Brittney Spears sort of way. I was trying to go for more whatever Rambo went through as a teenager."- I love this xDD It's great. It shows a lot of personality and it's really great. Even though it's just the summary, the way you write is slightly sarcastic and full of zing :D

    "Where “sorry’ was just another word in the dictionary and nothing really mattered at all anymore."- I wrote an essay on something like this sentence and it's really great! You captured what I tried sayin in a four page essay in just one sentence. Great job. You're really creative :D

    "It’s just that strangers, to me, are the absolute greatest people in the world. Mostly because they can be anything I want them to be."- How you captured the feelings of strangers that this guy feels is absolutely amazing. I can definitely see him being someone I'd get along with. I feel the same way about strangers and it's really great. Good job!

    "She spent her entire life working tooth and nail, sweat and tears trying to provide a decent living for her daughter ever since she escaped her abusive husband. The crows feet that crinkle at her skin like an old canvas painting tell of a rock hard determination and a unwavering spark of hope."- This section. Killed me, I swear. This old women seems like a beautiful person and the way you describe her is absolutely beautiful. His attitude towards strangers again, is beautiful. I love your descriptions of the characters. It's absolutely artistic and creative. You're an amazing writer.

    “Let’s get ice cream before I rip you a new asshole.”- this killed me. It's so funny! Your sense of humor is absolutely amazing xD

    Overall, you've got a solid writing style for this story. I didn't see any grammar mistakes and I didn't say anything I could really critique. Maybe some repetitive word usage, but great otherwise! You've got great talent.
    February 6th, 2012 at 12:55am
  • nautical.

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    Me gusta mucho. I love the way you write,
    like, his attitude is hilarious and you make it so perfect.
    avjnseika.

    But I only know one Miles and he is totally weird in that, "im a genious and I plan to bring in a gun one day and shoot all of you idiots" type of way. And he smells bad.
    February 4th, 2012 at 09:32pm
  • silk tea.

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    Everything you write is literally always just perfection. I love the tone of this, the way it's written and Miles. He's funny and I feel like we would get along, and I would totally enjoy forcing Rory to come out. I do the same exact thing with strangers, making up their lives or if they're attractive mentally seducing them. Basically though, this is beautiful. I can't wait for you to update and I'm obviously subscribing. I miss your face.
    February 3rd, 2012 at 10:12pm
  • paralumana

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    I fucking love this, I swear. You're my favourite writer bruuhh ;D And jajajajajaja I love your sense of humour! Please keep writing ( :
    February 3rd, 2012 at 07:13pm
  • Scarlet Fields

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    Love it.
    Hah, There's a Miles I know, and he is THE pothead in my grade. Lolz
    February 2nd, 2012 at 05:49am
  • Sapphire Eternity

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    I have to admit something, I sort of love this story already. Like a lot!

    Your writing style is great and easy to follow. I subscribed and I look forward to an update :D
    February 1st, 2012 at 05:46am
  • eight letters late.

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    I knew a Miles once, and I was like completely in love with him but he didn't love me back, but whatever. This is gr8 and you should continue. I want to know their story and why Callie is such a fucking catastrophe. GET ON DIS.
    January 24th, 2012 at 11:18pm
  • callisto

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    Ahhh I'm already in love with Miles (and his name). I love the way you write, it's kind of quirky and I love your sense of humor. Anyway, I can't wait for Callie's grand debut! I'll be subscribing :)
    January 22nd, 2012 at 06:21pm
  • paralumana

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    This looks very promising, and it's just chapter one. I'm curious about Callie now ;D SUBSCRIBED!
    January 22nd, 2012 at 05:42pm
  • eight letters late.

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    If you asked me what I thought of this story so far, I'd tell you awesomeness and every other synonym for the word.

    sounds sew gud bb
    January 22nd, 2012 at 04:15pm
  • losing control.

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    3icejxw4dtkls3co

    Hello. I love you. xD

    No but really, this looks like it's going to be such an amazing story. I love stories that happen in the summer, for some weird reason, so I'm terribly excited.

    And Callie is the type of character I love to read about. The ones that are all disastrous but still somehow make it through the day.

    And your writing is amazing. So I'm super duper excited.

    That is all. xD
    October 22nd, 2011 at 12:00am
  • nautical.

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    Oh my gosh. I'm in love.

    With Callie already. And yoyr writing. But I mean, Callie is already my favorite type of character.

    This is just overall fabulous. c:
    October 21st, 2011 at 11:52pm